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Postby jamestoffee » August 23rd, 2011, 7:27 am

Y9W43 Scarlet Letters

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Stealing a kiss
Breaking a vow
Hoping this all works out somehow
Hating the ways I sneak and creep around

It's sad how I offend
It's not what I intend
Resolve is gone
Here I go again

Half a truth
Not quite a lie
Still I can't look her straight in the eye
I'll be home late again tonight

I'm sorry I pretend
It's not what I intend
Resolve is gone
Here I go again

Wrap her neck with trinkets and tokens
Sacred love is sweetest when stolen
Is there hope; hope for the broken?
Scarlet letters come in every shape and size

Scratching an itch
Fetishes qu*eer
Catch a glimpse and there's plenty to fear
Don't know how I always end up here

I'm not as strong as I pretend
I confess and say Amen
It's not easy but
I'm on the mend

And it comes as no surprise
Scarlet letters come in every shape and size
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Postby John Sargent » August 23rd, 2011, 9:07 am

Using red letters in the lyrics? Cool concept. I like the chord progression and the song. I thought about a Stolen kisses line but thought the Powers that Judge would declare shenanigans and proclaim cliche.
I don't have time to write this week. If I did, I would use the key words to do a song about the American game of baseball. Stolen bases, broken bats, hating the Yankees.
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Postby jamestoffee » August 23rd, 2011, 3:26 pm

Hi MrEWorm,

MrEWorm wrote: I like the chord progression and the song.

Thanks. I've been reading about the Beatles songs and use of chord progressions and experimenting.

MrEWorm wrote: I would use the key words to do a song about the American game of baseball.

I thought about that, too b/c when I put all the "key words" into a google search, I came across Rickey Henderson "The Man of Steal"
http://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Rickey_Henderson
....but I'm not a sports fan.

Thanks for the listen and post :D

Safe travels for you.

James
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Postby pbee » August 28th, 2011, 3:31 pm

Hi James, those words were quite tricky I thought, using the bullet point approach as youve done here certainly makes it easier, nicely done. I always enjoy a little bit of abiguity in a song, "Wrap her neck with trinkets and tokens" nice line.

cheers
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Postby jamestoffee » September 4th, 2011, 6:10 am

Hi Paul,

I'm late with the thank you on this one. I'm not sure how I missed your post, but thanks for the listen and feedback on this one :D
pbee wrote:those words were quite tricky I thought

Yes, I agree. With this one I just had to let the story unfold itself even if it came out a bit dark.

Thanks again.

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