Y12 W24

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glprattimages
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Y12 W24

Post by glprattimages » April 18th, 2014, 2:42 pm

This the first chance I've had to sit down at my computer this week to post something. I jotted down some lyrics while at work. Not sure what direction I'm going to take music wise yet.

It took just 24 hours
for the fire to grow cold
24 hours for the love to die
and passion to grow old

Life is to short
to dwell on the past
got to always remember
relationships don't always last

chorus
Its been 24 hours
since you went away
24 hours, and its
a brand new day
I'll scream at the top of my lungs
till my dying day
life had never been better
till you walked away

I could sit around and cry
I could try to drink
your memory away
but life is to short
to waste any more time
on you today

chorus

Think I'll just step back
and accept the change
shift the gears
and enjoy life in a different lane

chorus

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Re: Y12 W24

Post by jamestoffee » April 18th, 2014, 7:44 pm

Hi,

Good start :D

I was away all week as well, so I can relate to no time :wink: On reading your lyrics, I had a somewhat similar idea, but kudos to you for getting it down.

Suggestion:

The time frame make the lyrics "unbelievable" -not in a good way, but in the sense that it does not seem realistic.....an easy fix could be changing hours to days, weeks, months, or years.....or change it up to count something like "lies", "kisses", "dates", "mornings" (mornings- would be closer to days)

Thanks for sharing.

James

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