Y13W2 There’s A Large Gaping Hole in Everyone

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Y13W2 There’s A Large Gaping Hole in Everyone

Post by jamestoffee » November 9th, 2014, 3:09 am

Y13W2 There’s A Large Gaping Hole in Everyone

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Comic by Dresden Codak
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There’s a large gaping hole in everyone
There’s a large gaping hole in everyone
While it’s not uncomfortable it’s just a large gaping hole
There’s a large gaping hole in everyone

It’s widely considered unsightly
It’s widely considered unsightly
While it’s not uncomfortable it’s just a large gaping hole
There’s a large gaping hole in everyone

Some people fill it with religion
Others just buy a bunch of stuff
And some even fill it with other folks
There’s a large gaping hole in everyone

Solo

But I left my alone
I left my alone
‘Cause I found if you run against the wind
If you run against the wind at just the right angle
It makes a whistling noise

There’s a large gaping hole in everyone
There’s a large gaping hole in everyone
While it’s not uncomfortable it’s just a large gaping hole
There’s a large gaping hole in everyone

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Re: Y13W2 There’s A Large Gaping Hole in Everyone

Post by Hobson » November 12th, 2014, 7:00 am

James, I like the comic. The song doesn't work for me. I've been trying to figure out why. There are at least two reasons. First, I don't think that the title phrase is catchy. Maybe you could come up with something else that conveys the same idea. Second, why would the singer not fill his life with some kind of meaning? OK if he doesn't, but another verse explaining that might help, at least for me.
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Re: Y13W2 There’s A Large Gaping Hole in Everyone

Post by jamestoffee » November 12th, 2014, 8:56 pm

Hi Renee,

I imagine this song won't appeal to many. For me, it fits in the category of "The Far Side" comics or Jack Handy's "Deep Thoughts"

The basic idea is setting up something figuratively, but having a literal conclusion. In some ways it's trite, but in other ways it's meaningful.
Hobson wrote:why would the singer not fill his life with some kind of meaning? OK if he doesn't, but another verse explaining that might help, at least for me.
This is what I like about the comic and idea. It does not assume the hole has to be filled, so that's also why I would chose not to explain more. I like the ambiguity.....sometimes a hole has a deeper meaning....sometimes a hole is just a hole.

.....but again, I appreciate your feedback as this kind of thinking/humor might not have much appeal....then again....like you said, you liked the comic, so a song might not be the medium to get the idea across as well as the visual did.

Thanks for the listen and feedback :D

James

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Re: Y13W2 There’s A Large Gaping Hole in Everyone

Post by pbee » November 17th, 2014, 12:08 pm

I love it. I think the whistling is really the point, reminds me a little of Jack Nicholson in "One Flew Over the Cuckoos Nest".
I can imagine this being sung a folk mass or prayer gathering, for me the whistling is grace, which indeed fills the hole.
One thing I would like to hear is the plucked strings at the very end as well.

Nice interpretation.

cheers

Paul

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Re: Y13W2 There’s A Large Gaping Hole in Everyone

Post by jamestoffee » November 17th, 2014, 3:01 pm

Hi Paul,
pbee wrote:the whistling is grace, which indeed fills the hole.

I love that interpretation :D
pbee wrote:One thing I would like to hear is the plucked strings at the very end as well.
I was hoping you would. I was trying prosody here and specifically did not end on the tonic/root note with the chord to create a "missing" sound and just the voice....so the intention was to make the listener feel the longing.

Thanks for the listen and feedback. :D

James

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