Y14W17 - One Eye on the Future

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Y14W17 - One Eye on the Future

Post by Hobson » March 1st, 2016, 1:52 pm

http://www.soundclick.com/bands/page_so ... D=13329264

verse:

When I met you,
You were living the blues.
But still I knew
You were the one.
I know I should have run.
I should have called it done
Before this fragile love
Had begun.

chorus:

You've got one eye on the future,
But your heart is in the past.
Maybe when we're married, you'll let go of her
At last.

verse:

When you close your eyes,
Tell me whose voice comes to mind
Whose face you find
In your dreams.
They say in the end
The wounds will mend.
But you can't pretend
Your anguish is routine.

verse:

Oh, destiny
Has spoken to me
And I need to be
With you forever.
But can't you see
There'll be no harmony
Until you're willing
To forget her.

chorus
Renee

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Re: Y14W17 - One Eye on the Future

Post by LingDar » March 3rd, 2016, 4:15 am

Pretty. I like the lyrics. The only criticism is that the music sounds very familiar. I don't feel like I am listening to something new. I like be the part where the music drops out and you sing occopela makes the song 5 times better.

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Re: Y14W17 - One Eye on the Future

Post by Hobson » March 3rd, 2016, 12:27 pm

I agree that there is nothing very interesting in the music. This is just a framework that could could use some more instruments or harmonies. I don't normally write country songs. I've had this kind of stuff on my brain because I've been accompanying a country singer. That will end soon and I hope to be back to more interesting stuff.

Thanks for taking the time to listen and comment.
Renee

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