- Alan Green
- Guitari Lama
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- Joined: September 23rd, 2002, 1:35 am
- Location: Little Cambridge, Essex, UK
Some of the line lengths are struggling but there's certainly some potential there.
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What sort of music do you have in mind for this? Knowing that would help get a better handle on how the lines will read.
You're off to an impressive start, sir!
and the redneck took to liking her really, really good
Excellent line - just oozes menace.
Echo Alan's comments on the line length in places.
Are you going to record and post it, cos it would be great to hear it.
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