This song is awesome and hilarious.

I know you have good stuff here since I can really picture the scene.Some ideas:At the beginning it seems like your talking to the house, but in the c...

Thank you everyone for the comments and thanks for the thoughtful rewrite. I guess I imagined that from the beginning the speaker is currently in his ...

Reminds me of Tom Waits, Heart attack and Vine"They say there ain't no devil there's just God when he's drunk."These are great lyrics.

It reads great.

I like the Boss man, but does he TRY to keep you down or does he actually do it:Maybe something like:The Devil's like the Boss manhe ain't got no resp...

Thanks for the input Ken. Your version is definitely more specific, but I definitely want to keep the seedier feel. I don't think they started this ch...

The lyrics are fantastic. I hope we get to hear the song.

It reads great. Looking forward to hearing it.

I love it. It was you on the line can you bring back some wine. That's great.I love how the caller is so casual but it means so much to the one being ...

If you look at rang and thing I think it could be just as good if not better to knock off "old thing""I was packing my bag when the phone rangdidn't a...

There is so much good stuff in there! Maybe too much? I had to really focus to get into it. More like reading a poem. A chorus or a little more repeti...