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1st go at song writing - John Lennon style song

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(@rockstar46)
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Hi, This is my 1st ever go at writing a song, i havent got the music done yet (although i do have some ideas) but i just wanted some views on the writing. Anyways, It's quite an honest and out there song (hence why i would imagine it in a John Lennon kind of style). I would love to hear some comments positive and negative but not toally brutal haha thank you for your time.

Nobody said it was easy
Nobody said it was hard
I guess you'll find out in your own way
What's its like to be in love

You don't know what to expect
It's not like the movies you see
When you try so hard to be perfect
It isn't always what you can be

Sometimes you're blinded by the world around
You don't see what's really there
That's when you make your mistakes
And leave yourself feeling' scared

Nobody said it was easy
Nobody said it was hard
I guess you'll find out in your own way
What's its like to be in love

You have your good days and your bad
Some days you wanna run a mile
You find out that you're fighting over nothing at all
But in the end you know you'll both smile

But could you see a world without it?
And not share it with someone you love
Spend your life together with meaning
There's something you can be dreaming of

Nobody said it was easy
Nobody said it was hard
I guess you'll find out in your own way
What's its like to be in love

Nobody said it was easy
Nobody said it was hard
I guess you'll find out in your own way
What's its like to be in love


   
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(@rockstar46)
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Just one minor mistake i made, the last bit of the chorus is meant to read:

What it's like to be in love.

not

What's it like to be in love


   
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(@s1120)
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I like it.. I can realy hear it being a catchy song...

I can see this part..

But could you see a world without it?
And not share it with someone you love
Spend your life together with meaning
There's something you can be dreaming of

Being totaly diferent musicaly then the rest of the song... kinda jumping out in a totaly diferent style for that one verce.... Why??? I dont know... just popped out that way when I read it

Paul B


   
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(@rockstar46)
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Hey, thanks for the reply.

Looking at it, i see where your coming from. I suppose i was trying to make it so that the song as a whole would be a little more positive towards the end but maybe it wouldnt work with the rest of it.

The only thing i can think of it maybe trying to turn that verse into a bridge or something?? if that doesnt work i'll re-write it into something that fits better...

Trial & Error isnt it...

Thank you.


   
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(@lane1777)
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I don`t think you have far to go with this song, I like the content. good writing


   
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You never know what's coming
It's not like in the movies
When you try to be the hero
But you end up looking goofy

It's the rock that gives the stream its music . . . and the stream that gives the rock its roll.


   
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(@s1120)
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Hey, thanks for the reply.

Looking at it, i see where your coming from. I suppose i was trying to make it so that the song as a whole would be a little more positive towards the end but maybe it wouldnt work with the rest of it.

The only thing i can think of it maybe trying to turn that verse into a bridge or something?? if that doesnt work i'll re-write it into something that fits better...

Trial & Error isnt it...

Thank you.

I did not say that as being a problem. What I was talking about was turning that into a bridge in a diferent style then the rest of the song. I like the verse, and can see it popping out of the song... as the Beatles were known to do also...

Paul B


   
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Its a good start and welcome to the the wild ride known as songwriting. There is a lot to learn. As I read I'm hearing a melancholy "Nobody Loves You When You're Down and Out" kind of song.

http://www.soundclick.com/bands/default.cfm?bandID=1228093


   
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