I need some help on this one. The last verse sounds kinda comical, it wasn't my intension. And anything else you feel that needs correction or alterations please feel free to give me your opinion(s).
Thanks,
Virg
ps. it's a true story
DANGEROUS GYPSY
Virgel Cane (2004)
(G) I was her (D) lover, for (Em) just one (Bm) Summer
(C) She kissed me and (D) slowly walked (G) away
(G) How many (D) years (Em) before these (Bm) tears
(C) Will let me (D) see the (G) day
CHORUS:
(D) Dangerous (Em) gypsy,
(D) Dangerous (Em) gypsy,
(C) Let my (D) sprit go, (G)
(C) Let my (D) shadow (G) show
I see you in stores, catch your scent outdoors
Desire and hope race and burn
My heart jumps pace, she turns her face
Once again I'm left to yearn
CHORUS:
It must have been right, there's not cause for spite
But I could never let you in again
I'm no rut rider or pain strider
But your still knockin' on my brain
CHORUS: (softly to mute)
Hi Virgel
Hey I like this a lot you said "The last verse sounds kinda comical,"
I was thinking if you added a bridge before the the last verse it might be what you need , just a suggestion
thats my 5 cents worth
have a great christmas
cheers
Aghhhh
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I'm now a bloody senior member
Are you people trying to tell me I'm old or what ?
over 700 posts ( I really do need to get out more )
Hi Virgel
Hey I like this a lot you said "The last verse sounds kinda comical,"
I was thinking if you added a bridge before the the last verse it might be what you need , just a suggestion
thats my 5 cents worth
have a great christmas
cheers
I AGREE WITH THE KING ( LOL )
Yeah Baby Yeah
Thanks Guys!
Hey, how/what is a bridge? Is it like a chorus only different?
a bridge basically ties the verse and chorus together i:e :
CHORUS:
Bridge :
( something like this )
why did you go
my life has become so slow
why did you go
tell me why
tell me why
It must have been right, there's not cause for spite
But I could never let you in again
I'm no rut rider or pain strider
But your still knockin' on my brain
Aghhhh
Not only am I a senior citizen
I'm now a bloody senior member
Are you people trying to tell me I'm old or what ?
over 700 posts ( I really do need to get out more )
Thanks loto King.
I still do have a question though.
Could I add a solo between the chorus and verse to ack as a bridge?