hi this a new song i wrote , it's kind of dark ... plz comment on it
about an athelete , whose close ones r dead
verse 1
the warmth of the early sun
on his curly hair
the birds of the mornin
singing
the tracks are bare
it's early morn he's here
he run every mornin
fresh air
CHORUS :
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he runs
he runs his laps
he cries
he cries his tears
mom and dad are dead
the warmth
of tears burnin down his cheeks
burnin down his soul
all that's left within
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verse 2
all alone , in the evenin
he sits by a fire sipping
the coffee that helps
him beathe in
he had a cute lover, funny
now she's dead ,
the time's that left
killin
CHORUS
BRIDGE
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till the mornin comes , the fire wont last
wat u gotta do , u gotta do it fast
sacry thoughts , but suicide's borin
everyone's so dead , maybe he can last
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so ....
he runs
he runs his laps
he cries
he cries his tears
mom and dad were dead
the warmth
of tears burnin down his cheeks
burnin down his soul
all that's left within
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PS : i was thinkin abt a country tune for this ..
song was originally called .. r u ready
where it talked abt the emotionally dead athelete
rising from the ashes , and fighting life to come out trumps . But "dead athelete" sounds better
than " r u ready" so .. i killed his loved ones .
:twisted:
