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(@zajeb)
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when i wrote this i was piss drunk for 2 days and i dont think it will ever be aveilable 2 be done with some music :D

but i still think this is good jobe as i dont like that classical style 4 line verses with paralel or cross ryming :D

and as I open another bottle of answers
searching for cures for my wounds and troubles
I still see your eyes and just drink another
to finely find that place where I don’t care
where you are, what you do, true love, is it you
what you think, do you care, where’s the end, am I there
all my troubles are still here but I only think of you
go away now, with this drink, leave me be
I would love that, just to be alone just me
even for a mere dream let me be don't hunt me there set me free
I wan ‘a be like I was before so I open Pandora’s box and fly true my fears
trying to rich that place that I still believe is real
where I can find and love someone I don’t
and not see your smile and not whish it was you and not even care
where you are, what you do, true love, is it you
what you think, do you care, where’s the end, am I there
and spirits that fly around me thru music cry out your name
and all the songs are yours I just didn’t know till now
I wrote them all for you and nothing you do can change this
because I already hate you yet love you even more
your smile your touch your laugh I love them too much
I love all the beauty of your soul yet I love your faults even more
tonight I don't drink to forget you I tried I swear
I drink to forget this day, yet another I can’t bear


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 Anonymous
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I like it, in particular you're approach of.....well, not having an approach! (if you get what i mean)

I think that you're point come accross well in the lyrics, even if it is a bit crowded in there!

Good job

Pete


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(@zajeb)
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Thx :D
i know it is crouded and it is like that because i was drunk and now i should realy splitt it up in werses but i realy don't feel like it :D


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 Anonymous
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I disagree, I think that if you were to split it up then it would lose the essence of what is it;

a drunken spillage of thoughts and feelings.

And we've ALL had those ;)

Pete


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