Hey guys just throwing up some lyrics looking of opinions and suggestions. Thank you for taking the time to read this.
Falling to fast
The sun rises
over my little bed
and your that prize inside
no memories
are coming to my head
over the previous night
are you a fallen angel
that I'm blessed to meet
or are you a devil in disguise
wrapped in milky white sheets
I know
one thing thats true
I'm falling for you
and I know
one thing thats true
I'm falling too fast
I'm falling too fast
for you
The sun rises
over my little bed
and your nowhere in sight
you didn't
even let me say goodbye
before you slipped into the night
what do you want from me
my heart or my time
or maybe just these two arms
that can make you feel fine
And I know
one thing thats true
I'm falling for you
and I know
one thing thats true
I'm falling to fast
I'm falling to fast
for you
(Chorus)
-Chris-
wow one of the best of I've read. short snappy to the point and flowing. Could fit to fast or slow tempo.
next step is the melody. got that yet?
gram99
"Nothing happens until something moves."
Albert Einstein
I have most of the song written... including the melody... it's a moderatre pace, with a simple 3 chord progression... thanks for the kind words.
-Chris-
Hey
A nice lyric. Only thing I'd highlight for looking at is:
you didn't
even let me say goodbye
It seems a bit awkward? Too many sylables changing the vocal rhythm maybe. Of course vocal phrasing may sort it out.
wrapped in milky white sheets
Nice, poetic, but maybe too poetic for the rest of the lyric.
Hope this helps
Cheers
John
Hey, thanks for the reply, I understand where your coming for when you talk about the syllables, word phrasing helps me out oin that, it's amazing how the word "even" can become one syllable when you want it to :lol:
-Chris-
