Ok, this is one of the first songs that I've ever written in my life, so therefor, it's definatly NOT the greatest, nor is it complete. But I figured that I would post what I had so far on here anyway to see what yall thought about it, and what advice you might have for me as well. Any comments or tips are much appriciated :)
Confused by the words you said to me
From all the lies that I believed
Replaying over in my head
You held my heart when you held my hand
And I trusted you with all I had
But that's a mistake that I won't make again
Some things never change and some stay true
So know that I'll never go back to you
Strong as a stone, yet free as the wind
The rain keeps pouring but my heart won't give in
i like your lyrics for this song nothing stands out that i think should be changed its achually pretty good for the first song. i heard a bit of avril lavine style
:D mystic
Hi GG,
not bad at all. My only comment is this:
Some things never change and some stay true
So know that I'll never go back to you
Strong as a stone, yet free as the wind
The rain keeps pouring but my heart won't give in
I like the analogy with the stone but in the last line you switch from the analogy to you, mid stream, maybe something like this, where the whole line is about you from the start.
Some things never change and some stay true
So know that I'll never go back to you
Strong as a stone, yet free as the wind
My head keeps wanting but my heart won't give in
Good work, keep it up
Paul
