Help needed.... i'm a little rusty

Hi'a back again after a very long time away, in a country with DSL..... and time to get back to my song writing which is very rusty. I think the chorus could have a really great hook line, but I am not sure about the verses. Any comments would be greatly appreciated. :P

Did I walk in your shoes - © Ja'mir 2008

Did I walk in your shoes, or have you walked in mine
Shared sorrow, tears, joy – or just moments in time
Did I walk in your shoes, or have you walked in mine
Both sparks of creation, earth energies entwined

We pass in the main street, a glimpse from caste down eyes
and wonder , mirror or reflection as our minds meander by
Not thinking where we're going , autopilot in control
Despite our different lives, we're in the same hellhole

Did I walk in your shoes, or have you walked in mine
Shared sorrow, tears or joy – or just moments in time
Did I walk in your shoes, or have you walked in mine
Both sparks of creation, earth energies entwined

You're from the fancy hill, I'm from the poor old railway shack
I was born a white child , while you were born black
A silver spoon in your mouth, no hungry mouths to feed
Yet here we are on main street, both red blooded and in need

We both hear the shrieking siren, in agony we wait, what is the outcome, what is our fate
both of us stranded in a moment in time, both sparks of creation, earth energies entwined

Did I walk in your shoes, or have you walked in mine
Shared sorrow, tears or joy – or just moments in time
Did I walk in your shoes, or have you walked in mine
Both sparks of creation, earth energies entwined

Thanks as always

Ja'mir :wink: