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i'm not sure what to say... don't in any way mean to hurt your feelings so please don't take it personal, i don't like it. how long have you been writing songs? I would try being your age as i saw in another post focusing on something other than world events for a song.

ok, i like the advice, but i find sometimes i will always write about the same thing... i swear like 80% of my osngs talk about love. I am trying to avoid that. I guess i have a hard time comming up with a topic to write about.

what i like to do is just come up with a word, examples that i've done are fear, help, pain. that's something good to do... also you might try writing a love song twisted around into an get away from me you won't leave me alone love songs. It's true that sometimes love songs get old, but as long as yo put a new twist on it it can work.. see what you can do.

Well, may I disagree?

I think the potential is enormous. Just get rid of "Why can't we all just get along ",and perhaps refine the idea a little, and it's a goodie.
Too often we have half-assed pseudo protest and moanings, too often we have the voice of inexperience telling us of it's assumed wisdom.
This is different, and I think it should be APPLAUDED as such.

Good work.

sure you can disagree. it was just my personal opinion.

I thank you Gino, for your kind words, and I will look into fixing that line. Rejectedagain: I just wanted to say, when you listed words to write songs about they were all very pessimistic. I tend to write my songs with optimism, and talking about the joy of life etc...

those were just examples you can write a song just about any word. i wasn't trying to be rude in what i was saying and i don't think i was rude.. can someone not say something without being criticized back, i wasn't criticizing i was just stating a personal opinion. i'm sorry i offended you. not my purpose.

I am sorry if I criticized you. I asked for your opinion and you gave me just that soi thank you. All I meant was that i tend to write positive lyrics. Not too say that I don't completley avoid writing those kind of songs. You have to, everyone goes through bad times...

What do you guys think of changing verse 2 to:

Politics are in a flury
Everyones being undermined
should our country have to worry
before it all falls apart

lines 1 and 3 are good but my question is how does it flow into the chorus without a rhyme for the 4th line. that's my only question with that one i might try and change it from a 1 and 3 rhyme to a 2 and 4 rhyme it MIGHT flow better into the chorus is what i personally think... it sorta kinda feels like it just drops... then your just like well that didn't make sense i could be totally crazy but just an opinion again

another thing with that verse is i guess it could be just how you sing it that we can't see because it can only be heard.

I think youre right about switching it around. Thanks. If anyone else has any comments go ahead.

no problem.