Imaginary Time
(Verse 1)
I wake up...
Feel the sun for the first time..in a lifetime..
I feel the cold air on my face.. As the morning ascends from grey..
And the sky rises above me like the dreams i once had.. and still do..
Each time averted, thrown away..like coulds droppin' rain..
Beats down on me and fades away.
(Verse 2)
Time i never knew..i wish i could be there when you..
Come away and look down on the pavement you once knew..
Find yourself lost on a road you know by heart..
Approaching the end and yet it seems so far away..
I cant see it...
I cant see it...
(Chorus)
Time fades..but you cant see it... anything..
I fade..but you cant feel it... then it goes away..
I know ive played this game to the breaking point... and i dont see how..
You fade..but i finally see it.. now i see it.
(Chorus)
Time fades..but you cant see it... not anything..
I fade..but you cant feel it... then it goes away..
I know weve both played this game... to the breaking point..
You fade..but i finally see it.. now i see it.
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I know this song doesnt really have the best construction, i.e. verse-chorus-verse-chorus, but the way i hear it in my head it seems to benefit from it, just keeps building, anyway :) .
I usually love to give bi complicated critiques, but very simply, this kicks @$$ 8)
If you want some help putting music to it I'd be glad to help :D
I don't follow my dreams, I just ask em' where they're going and catch up with them later.
-Mitch Hedburg
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I'm usually a regular at guitarnoise, but I've been off for a while since site maintenance... and changed my username, so here goes my first critic with the new name! :D
What I like about this song is the way it seems to flow so easily, the lines roll off the tounge and each line contributes to the next. I'd imagine it to be a real easy listening song, the message easily absorbed by the listener.
I wouldn't worry too much about structure and so forth- I've found it's much more effective to work from the inside out, so just get the initial creative splurge captured your own expressive style- eventually your main idea will form, (chorus) followed by versus, bridges etc. Just let it happen- it is indeed already coming along nicely.
'Imaginary Time' <---- this is a great title for the song, 'imagery' seems to fit the disconnected but flowing nature of the song. An excellent title.
Well thats it from me... good luck with this, I look forward to hearing what type of music you intend to use :D
Jacqui :wink:
"Iam a question to the world... not an answer to be heard."
Cool song, I like the images it leaves in my mind. Wish I could add more but it looks like you got it together already. Take care Nite.....
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