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I liked the 1st and 2nd verses. I could put a plausible tune to them.

I feel lost now with no way
to find relief in the past
that I'll never see again
Tried to hold on to one day
slipped away it won't last
and it never came again

I could make the last 3 lines work by adding

*it slipped away, it wont last*
*and it will never come again*

But that is me putting a tune to it.

Not sure about the fourth. It could work

Hurricane - this song does have music to it. It is in the key of C and the verse chords are C, F, C, G, F, C. I try to make all same numbered lines in each verse the same amount of syllables. For example line 1 of verse 1 has the same amount of syllables as line 1 of verse 2, etc. As this can sometimes strain the verbiage and sometimes strain the melody it is always flexible.
Thanks for the input, it is always appreciated.

I like the lyrics.

Sounds pretty Kenny Rogers-ish without actually listening to what your ideas are for the sound.

Are the lines underneath the chorus part of it as well, or is that a sort of bridge, it seems that those lines would go well with the chorus each time throughout the song.

Thanks for the kind words. The part under the chorus is like a reoccurring bridge I guess or perhaps chorus part 2. It just seemed to fit and it worked very nice. In fact it is my favorite part of the song.

RC - I realize you had a tune for it and my bet is you can make it sound really good. What I meant was was that for me to sing it, (and therein lies the rub) I found I needed to change the lyrics at bit to make it work.

I am not a good singer - or a good guitar player. But I did give it a try, and just found that to be the point where I had modify it a bit.

Hurricane - I feel honored you liked the lyrics enough to play it and sing along. Thanks!
FYI - I said it was in C but that is only relative to the capo which is on the second fret. So, it is actually in D.
Enjoy.