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(@picture-perfect)
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Hey guys, here is my second song which ive written (maybe i should do an album) lol, im thinking about how to put the music in with it and im guessing since i want it to be a slow sad song that it should be acoustic with a slow drum beat if there is a drum in it, let me know what you think :D thanks

A Lonely night at Christmas

Snow falls onto the road,
As we start to stall,
I waited till the day grew old,
Because I thought you'd call,
Now I start to think again,
Exactly who we are,
And just how long you will pretend
That we could go quite far

It's a lonely night at Christmas
My heart starts to break inside,
It's a lonely night at Christmas
With all this pain I cannot hide

Another hopeless heart for the road,
Another hopeless tear hits the ground,
Without you my heart goes cold,
I feel like I've lost what I've just found
My head starts to shake,
With every broken scene,
I realise that our love was fake,
Something I must not have seen,

It's a lonely night at Christmas
My heart starts to break inside,
It's a lonely night at Christmas
With all this pain I cannot hide

I stopped my dreaming
When I stopped believing
Because you stopped me breathing
My pain needs relieving today

Snow falls on the road,
As we start to stall,
I waited till the day grew old,
Because I thought you'd call,
My head starts to shake,
With every broken scene,
I realise that our love was fake,
Something I must not have seen


   
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(@geek-in-the-pink)
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I think it is good. Good writing. You should put music in with it, it would sound good. :D You should post under the Sunday Songwriting forum.


   
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 Mike
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Very Good!!! :D

I can't wait to hear it with music.


   
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(@picture-perfect)
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thanks guys, what do you think the music should go like?


   
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 Mike
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I think Finger picking the verses and strumming the choruses would sound great.


   
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(@barnabus-rox)
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WOW

I have only ever written two songs myself but nothing like this .........

Amazing well done

Hilch

Here is to you as good as you are
And here is to me as bad as I am
As good as you are and as bad as I am
I'm as good as you are as bad as I am


   
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(@picture-perfect)
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Thanks for your comments guys and gals, much appreciated


   
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(@nolongerme)
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Excellent!!!


   
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