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"Long Time Coming"

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(@lostbeggining)
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Ok well....heres a love song i wrote last night, its just two verses at the mo and i apologize for that its just i didnt wanna throw in a chorus that might not fit right so i left it untill one comes to me, suggestions for chorus would be good if anyone has any....My main concern is with the flow and i think the meters off quite a bit...although ive sang it and its ok with how i sing it.....buuuuuuut here it is anyway--

Long time coming

V
The wind blows through the open window
And surrounds us as we lay
I pressed my hand against your skin
And we begin to feel the rain
I breath in your deepest beauty
As i feel the room fade away
And we float high upon this moment
Hoping not to come down again

C
Id give up everything
Just to be here with you
Cuz forever is nothing
When my life was made for you

V
The beauty burns inside your eyes
And it freezes up my heart
And it feels like there is nothing
That could ever pull us apart
But even if that is just a dream
Then i will never stay awake
Cuz these are the times i feel alive
And your in every breath I take

B
Your emerald worlds
They stop me in my heart
The love you give me
Reflects just how beautiful you are

Rain Shadow


   
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(@lotto-king)
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hey +LostBeggining+

What a beautiful start WOW I was having all these lovey dovey emotions running through me as I read this , great start will be looking out for this one being finished .

As usual your writting is truely wonderful and I am just wrapped that you post so many wonderful lyrics and lines .

great work

cheers

:D :D :D :D :D :D :D

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(@lostbeggining)
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wow...if you was serious then im completely unhumanly flattered......i personally would like to think you was being sarcastic just cuz i really dont think my lyrics deserve anywhere near that kinda compliment :shock: ....but...wow.....um...........................*runs*

I cant really get a grip on a chorus :S....really need some help with this one

Rain Shadow


   
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(@barnabus-rox)
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serious I hope I loved it

:D :D :D

Here is to you as good as you are
And here is to me as bad as I am
As good as you are and as bad as I am
I'm as good as you are as bad as I am


   
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(@lotto-king)
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hey +LostBeggining+

You said "you was being sarcastic just cuz i really dont think my lyrics deserve anywhere near that kinda compliment "

Well I think you do , and I'm NOT BEING sarcastic , just take the compliment and finish this wonderful piece .

Even Hilch thinks it's damn good he wrote "serious I hope I loved it "

Must be good please finish this and post the final out come

cheers

:D :D :D

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(@lostbeggining)
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thansk...um....will do.....ill try 2 n do it by 2morrow :?

Rain Shadow


   
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(@lotto-king)
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please don't rush to finish it , take your time I'm sure the wait will be worth it

:P :D 8)

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wow , like the king said really great stuff I'm very impressed

when will it be finished ?

Yeah Baby Yeah


   
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(@dillydally)
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Amazing song, one of those rare ones, that drags you in and gets you all emotional without the person thinking it's to "lovey dovey" or romantic.

It's 15 Till And She Has The Other 45 In Her Mouth.


   
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