Here are some lyrics that I wrote, I dont have a definite tune yet. Please give your thoughts good or bad.
How far are we going?
What is it I like about you?
That I can't get out of my head
Is it the look inside your eyes?
Or is it from the words you said
There's something that's inside of me
It's telling me to go ahead
Is this as far as we are going
Or is this just how far you've led
How far do you lead?
How far do I lead?
How far do you lead?
How far do I lead?
How far are we going?
We'll go further than can be said
It's the only way to get ahead
It's the look in side your eyes
And from the things you say
It's my heart inside of me
Telling me that it's okay
This isn't as far as we're going
Come on I'll lead the way
How far do you lead?
How far do I lead?
How far do you lead?
How far do I lead?
How far are we going?
We'll go further than can be said
It's the only way to get ahead
We'll walk this road till were dead
How far are we going?
How far dare we go?
How far are we going?
We'll go this far I know
Guessing it's about someone you have feelings towards? Also seems like a poem, don't know what kind of tune/tempo would go to it.
It's 15 Till And She Has The Other 45 In Her Mouth.
Yeah this song is about someone I know. I kinda have a tune that i like but I'm not really sure. Did the words make sense and all? Don't bea afraid to say anything.
The second four pairs of lines seems like a rewrite of the first four pairs of lines, and I think you need to develop what's going on more.
Best,
A :-)
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Is this as far as we are going
Or is this just how far you've led
I loved that line. I got the same feeling that alan wrote about the lines being kind of repeatitive. Otherwise I liked the song.
Keep it up!
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Thanks guys for the thougths, I agree and will try rewritng some of it :D :D :D