Hi all,
Havnt been here for a bit, thought I'd post a new song I've almost written (needs padding out) to see what people think of it so far. It's gonna be in 2 versions, a mellow gentle acoustic ballad, and a heavier electric version. Anyway, all feedback appreciated,
Many thanks,
Rob
Fall Like Rain
The light outside the window fades,
The darkness steals, comes creeping in,
The ghosts around me stay the same,
A dead man trapped within his skin,
The past is just a memory,
There's nothing left here anymore,
I sit here on my own again,
And my tears fall like rain
Fall…Like…Rain…
The pain I feel is deep within,
It's nothing I can just cut out,
The scars don't show up on my face,
They're stitched in deep across my heart,
The past is just a memory,
There's nothing left here anymore,
I sit here on my ow-n now,
And my tears fall like rain
Fall…Like…Ra-a-in…
Fall…Like…Rain
This battered dream you took from me,
A fragile hope you won't set free,
Your twisted lies, your poisoned mind,
How was I blind but now I see?
The past is just a memory,
There's nothing left here anymore,
I sit here on my own again,
And my tears fall like rain,
See them fall…like…rain
"You got the heart kid... but you don't got the tools no more....."
"DRAGOOO!!!!!!!!"
hey, I really like this! I can certainly hear the mellow version of it, harder to imagne the heavier version but I'm sure it could work, a kind of My-chemical-romance style song :P
I particularly like the first 4 lines, they really draw you into the song :)
Pete
ETD - Formerly "10141748 - Reincarnate"