verse
i wanna feel your disease from long ago
before i was sadly mistaken for something so cold
shes got all the boyes obsessed (the things theyll do for a pretty face)
shes got her hands around our necks (and she knows it)
now there just dying to impress (theyll never be the same)
pre chorues mayby:
can we get carnal
i wanna get carnal..do you?
verse 2. (still working on)
you got a glare i cant stand
but i love to be around you
those marble eyes they stair
directly into me
yet you still past right through the flesh
still figuring out a chorus and im thinking about adding more parts to it , tell me what you think
Hi Russlia
I think you may have posted in the wrong forum so I'm moving your song to the songwriting club board. The SSG is mainly for people following particular assignments I've dreamt up for them and consequently off topic posts can free fall down the board without comment and can leave you a tad disappointed with the lack of comment. Please feel free to join in with SSG any time but remember there is an assignment for that particular week at the top of the board.
Bob :wink:
You are what you eat, eat well
