This Frost - A sad song.

I just wrote this song. It comes straight from my current emotions, so it seems powerful to me, but i need some outside opinions. It comes with chords, but no timing. the strumming pattern is dduduududu per bar, with 2 bars per chord, and the song is slower (about 88-100bpm).

This Frost
Dm---------------Am
I can't bear to think about all that matters most to me. (the "I" is held for about 5 seconds)
Gm---------------------------Dm
It makes my Eyes darken, it makes my Heart bleed
Dm----------------------------------------------Am
It feels like an all consuming frost within, claiming my senses,
Gm-----Dm
Making me numb

Dm
I wish I had never known
Am
Never asked what you meant
Gm
This frost
Dm
Making my senses tired and bent

(the chords are like tis though the song exept for the bridge, where its a Adlibbing with Gm, Dm, Am, and possibly Em. (also, possibly add in some Gm7, Dm7, Am7, and possibly Em7))

I don't know what to do. Don't know what to say,
I feel so lost, this nagging frost, Just won't go away.
I sometimes think what it would be like
If I Had not asked to know more

I wish I had never known
Never asked what you meant
This frost
Making my senses tired and bent

So now I sit here, wholly beaten down, I cannot smile,
It hurts too much to take in one breath
Something that isn't natural
When you feel Like Falling

I wish I had never known
Never asked what you meant
This frost
Making my senses tired and bent
This frost

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Feel free to b open with your opinions, telling me where i could work on and other stuff like that.