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(@lostbeggining)
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Hey....wrote this at the beginning of this year i think....thought id post it

Unseen Love

As the blood drips from this rose
And breaks upon the thorn
This one everlasting day
Fades into its dawn
You never knew the depths of my heart
Now all its colours are out on display
You never knew this beauty could fall apart
When everything i felt was hidden away

Well i said id die for your truth
On this cold and bitter night
I said this hole would always bleed
Untill the river as run dry

As the beauty in your loving eyes
Haunts my lonely dreams
The sweet chill of the final words
Slowly begin to turn to screams
You were all that was in my heart
And i never took a step away
So tell me can i meet you in the stars
If you feel my heart there someday

Well i said id die here for you
If you still cant see the light
I said that they would break us
With their unsympathetic lies

bad i know but....any comments would b kool....

NeM H

Rain Shadow


   
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(@anonymous)
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Joined: 17 years ago
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no, it's good. it's feels real, and that's tough to do. now, just as long as you don't emo it up, it should sound fine. or maybe you should. what do i know?


   
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(@pierson)
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The sweet chill of the final words
Slowly begin to turn to screams Now that's good. I liked the song. Don't be so hard on yourself! I thought it was good. Keep it up!

There's a thin fine line between hate and rage.
Now watch the line be crossed and break!


   
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