_ Verse 1
| I don't quite care
| what you're looking for in me
| I'm just the victim
| of a fucked up reality
|
| I'm not built up
| so you can't tear me down
| I may be the king of fools
|_but i don't wear the crown
_ Verse 2
| I don't want
| to be your friend
| Nothing was ever started
| How could it ever end?
|
| Don't ask me how
| but i don't like this place
| nothing good can happen
|_I dropped out of the race
It's only 2 verses, but it's the first writing I've done in about 8 months. I hope this is a good sign. :D
I wanna see it painted black, painted black
Black as night, black as coal
I wanna see the sun, blotted out from the sky
I wanna see it painted, painted, painted, painted black
tack, feels like nu-metal to me. considering that you wrote this after quite a gap, it pretty ok. just try to put those feelings in a different set of words. you'll be a lot more unique. as of now, this song doesn't sound much different from any other "i-am-so-f!@$&d-up" song...just my op. no offence :wink:
None taken! :) if i didn't want to hear it, I wouldn't have posted! :lol: I agree, they are kind of nu-metal. They were just thrown together during class. But they have potential!
I wanna see it painted black, painted black
Black as night, black as coal
I wanna see the sun, blotted out from the sky
I wanna see it painted, painted, painted, painted black
