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JoeHempel
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I'm calling this a work in progress....I was messing around and discovered the opening to this great tune. So I wanted to do the rest, I just really get into the song for some reason.

It's the first time that I think I do anything than stare at paper LOL, and it's the first arrangement I've done that has any sort of percussion in it...but please let me know what you think!!

In Space, no one can hear me sing!

 
Posted : 29/07/2010 1:52 pm
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I liked it, very good Joe.

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Posted : 30/07/2010 6:36 pm
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Thanks, I appreciate it!

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Posted : 31/07/2010 2:50 am
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Sounds good to me Joe. Nice job!

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Posted : 01/08/2010 2:16 am
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Good job Joe! I like it!

Just a couple of comments. There is a part of the song that I didn't remember in that way. It just a couple of notes. I didn't listen that song since some years so it is very possible I am wrong. On the other hand, as it is your own arrangement and it sounds good, it is good!

And also a personal taste: I prefer the part where you don't use that "percussive" way to play, I like the final part, it seems much smoother to me. But it is just a comment! It sounds good, too!

Thanks for sharing.

 
Posted : 01/08/2010 1:30 pm
JoeHempel
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Thanks TR!!

Nuno: Thank for the feedback. I did like how it switched up a bit without the percussion in the end...in the beginning it just seemed to make sense and I did it instinctively, but then when the chorus and such came it didn't make sense and I played the notes.

I think there are a couple timing issues that are there that I need to fix with the percussion and such, maybe even omit a couple of them, but so far, I think it's my best arrangement, and I'm working on a MUCH more complicated fingersetyle version of this song:

From 1;07 on:

Having alot of fun trying to figure out the horns and mesh it all together on one instrument. Hopefully I'll have it done in about a month, and then practice it a ton.

In Space, no one can hear me sing!

 
Posted : 01/08/2010 2:48 pm
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I agree with the timing comments and I also think I agree with Nuno about the percussive bits. It sounds odd on this end. Otherwise, very nice start for a WIP piece.

Roy
"I wonder if a composer ever intentionally composed a piece that was physically impossible to play and stuck it away to be found years later after his death, knowing it would forever drive perfectionist musicians crazy." - George Carlin

 
Posted : 02/08/2010 3:26 pm
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Nice job, Joe.
I really don't know the song and was having trouble time to time picking out the melody after the intro. Stretches seemed sort of randomly 'noodle-y'. Maybe you're trying to incorporate too much of the whole band arrangement? Might be worth looking at simplifying a bit? The percussive element worked for me.
:)

Don

 
Posted : 02/08/2010 4:09 pm