What do you think of my new attempt to sing?

I like the tone of your voice. it was pretty quiet sounding. you need more air pushing so breathe deeper and sing from the belly, not the throat. your pitch was off in a few places; mostly where you didn't push enough air and the voice trailed off.
keep it up. remember, every time you sing you have to pretend its a performance. put feeling behind everything.
this example had little performance. make me believe in your ability.