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(@john-sargent)
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https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=xctpU6SwA-k&feature=youtu.be

It's been very busy. I have these two verses running in my head but haven't had time to put them on paper nuchal less pick up an instrument. I'm typing this on my phone between appointments.

After you
Please let me get the door
I haven't seen you before
After you

After you
It's the polite thing to do
When you appeared I knew
I'd be after you


   
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Hi John,

Nice start :D So it seems like an initial meeting of a potential love interest -guy singing to a girl; using different meanings of "after you".....the last meaning to add could be along the lines of "I know I'll never love another woman after you."

With those as anchors, it would just be filling in some concrete details and done :wink:

I'm still looking for an angle to get going on this week's assignment.

Thanks for sharing.

James


   
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Yes, my basic idea is to use the phrase "After you" rather than "After you XXXed". It seems that there are lots of ways to use "After you" . Just don't have much time to devote to songwriting since I started my newest business venture.

I think the 2 verses that I laid out are actually the chorus which is hereby changed to

After you
Let me get the door
I haven't seen you here before
After you

After you
It's just a courtesy
And it just occurred to me
That I'll be after you


   
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John, I like what you have as the two choruses with the second one used later in the song as a twist. I think the obvious way to fill this in is to have the verses describe the woman and why you're attracted to her. But at this point it could go anywhere. Could be about not having loved anyone for a long time because of some past event and then meeting the woman of your dreams.

Renee


   
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I'm just not a chorus guy. I've looked through my catalog and see that I have written lots of refrains but few choruses (much less pre-chorus). After reviewing this, I got comfortable in my old refrain-ville style.

I think this is my finished lyric.....

After You

After you
Please let me get the door
After you
I haven’t seen you here before
It’s the polite thing to do
After you

After you
Just a courtesy
After you
It just occurred to me
That I like your attitude
And I'll be after you

I come here often
‘Bout once a week
To get my errands run
Love has never been on my list
But now my shopping is done

After you
Took my arm
After you
Said you were charmed
In that moment I knew
There would be no one
After you


   
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I tweaked the lyric a bit and tried out a melody w chords on this video
https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=
https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=xctpU6SwA-k&feature=youtu.be


   
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Hi John,

Great job! :mrgreen: It works very well. Simple and with a play on words.

Thanks for sharing. :D

James


   
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Thanks. The performance needs loads of work but I'm pretty sure that I'm sticking with this lyric and melody.


   
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That's great. I love all the meanings of "after you." The tune fits the lyrics very nicely.

Renee


   
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That's great. I love all the meanings of "after you." The tune fits the lyrics very nicely.

Thanks. It needs a jazz trio with an upright bass and a tenor saxophone.


   
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