Hi ,
Since my topic in news inspired David to pick Cowboys as a theme I thought I better get writing :lol:
This isn't finished yet but I just can't seem to write any more verses , { help ?? }
I was trying to write a song that people could really relate to instead of trying to write a song that reads nice , if you know what I mean ...
I want to be a cowboy
I don't want to be no super star
Driving around in some fancy car
Partying drugs and beautiful whores
I would rather be on my big black horse
A camp fire burning in the night
It's burning embers burn so bright
The flickering shadows on the ground
As I sleep beside my loyal hound
The city life just ain't for me
I would rather be alone and free
No one telling me what to do
The only thing I would miss would be you
I don't want to be no super star
Driving around in some fancy car
Partying drugs and beautiful whores
I would rather be on my big black horse
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All feed back welcomed
Trev.. :wink:
Here is to you as good as you are
And here is to me as bad as I am
As good as you are and as bad as I am
I'm as good as you are as bad as I am
Hmm, I don't agree with rhyming horse with whores. It just doesn't work for me. I think you might want to avoid rhyming in the last too lines, especially with the simple rhyme in the previous two lines.
i think you're getting better at this but i agree with the comment above about whores and horses.