Hello,
Let me first introduce myself. I'm Arjen, I'm 14 years old and live in Holland.
I'm writing lyrics for a while now and I have used the tips at the site. I only have one problem, when I have finished my lyrics I can't make music that fits at my music who can help me!?
here is one of my lyrics
why would I plan my life
Write your diary in advance
Make sure you have the best chance
You can't plan your life
Sometimes you wish you did it else
I did it my way
And it made me stay
There some things you will regret
You can't plan your life
Maybe it's better this way
‘Cause then I wont feel your breath
‘Cause I can't know you before we've met
I've asked my questions
I'm waiting for reply
I can't plan my life
But why should I
Oh, surprises would be gone
There'd be things which weren't undergone
You can't plan your life
Some things you wouldn't miss for any price
I did it my way
And it made me stay
There some things you will regret
You can't plan your life
Maybe it's better this way
‘Cause then I wont feel your breath
‘Cause I can't know you before we've met
I've asked my questions
I'm waiting for reply
I can't plan my life
But why should I
I would like to know if I'm doing something wrong in the lyrics or any help by writing music by your lyrics.
Greetings Arjen
PS. I'm sorry if my english is wrong I hope you understand what I mean
heya welcome to the forum
I'm Dutch too but I'll keep it in English so the others here can join in ^^ We Dutch are good at English anyway huh
First of all, you're in the wrong part of the forum. This is the Sunday Songwriters Group. Bob posts some assigment every sunday and everyone who wants to can write something according to that assigment and post it here. Why not try that some time?
As for the lyrics, I can't say you're doing anything wrong, it's all a matter of what you like. I think this are good lyrics, nice flow, and your English is very well if you're only 14! There's a few things I'd do different though.
There some things you will regret
I'd make
There are things you will regret
Also you jump from "you" to "I". I tend to write my songs using either I or you. But again, different people different tastes.
When I want to make some guitar parts for a song, I start with singing the lyrics. Making a melody of it. When I've got something I like, I grab my guitar and start hitting things randomly. When I get some sounds I like, I keep em. Until I've got a chord progression or something. There are general rules for it, which chord sounds best after another one, but I don't use any of them... I just play around until I find something I like. And yeah, I've written about a 100 lyrics so far, and maybe 10 made it all the way through and got recorded... And out of those I only like about 2.
In conclusion. I can't help you :lol:
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Hi and welcome
I have always found it easier if my length of lines were not real long like say 6 words long
and have a : ABC-ABC with the last words of each line like A might be the word LOVE
then the next A would ryhme like DOVE
B might be the word EYES
then the next B WOULD ryhme like SKIES
hope that helps
L.K
P.S
your song is very good
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