Music would be 12 bar blues. Any constructive criticism or tips would be great.
-Cheap Whiskey Blues-
Woke up this mornin' , Lord it hurt to tie my shoes.
(repeat)
I been drinkin' all night, got those cheap whiskey blues.
My head wont stop-poundin' ,wish the pain would go away.
(repeat)
If could get thru this, I swear I'll never drink again.
And I said that before. (toss in line)
Chorus-
I got those cheap whiskey blues.
Got those cheap whiskey blues. (2 more x)
If I don't stop this, It ill be the death of me soon.
(this part is where the band stops after each line)
Headed to my driveway, to see if my car was there.
I was crossin my fingers, and sayin a prayer.
When I saw my ride, I was so relieved.
Said thank you Lord, you must be watchin' over me!
Repeat Chorus.
Its not finished yet, but I was just wanting a little input before I continued.....Thanks.
" Thoughts that pay homage to frustration will attract frustration. When you say or think theres nothing I can do,my life has spun out of control,and I'm trapped,thats what you will attract ".
Hi Geo,
Welcome to the funderful world of song writting. Not bad for a first work! The first two verses seem to work well IMO. My only quibble would be the forced rhyme you have with away and again.
Maybe something like, "If could get thru this, I swear i'll never drink another day"
The chorus too seems to fit well.
The third verse isn't real clear to me . . . . going from waking up with a hangover and promising to quit drinking (again) if the pain would go away . . . to being grateful to God that your car is in your drive way . . . . . where it's supposed to be . . . . . . doesn't progress well for me. Perhaps if you had made an earlier reference to how you remember driving your car to drink but didn't remember how you got home . . . . . . . .
Anyway, that's just my reaction. But you've got a great start here and look forward to seeing more of your work.
Neil
