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Hello my friend of past times
We have come a long way
And now we find ourselves sitting
With a pen in our hands
And regrets in our head
For the dreams we let slide
And fullfilling just,
The emptiest of promises.
We never opened ourselves
Not after the first time
Because after she left
We swathed us in bubble-wrap
And telling our heart
That we need to discard it
It's just easier this way
Then why is it so hard.
And I'd like to return to your innocence
To be vunerable again. and able to trust
I hope that somewhere your inside me
And soon to come home and re-unite us.
Cos right now I'm bitter
Looking to smash things
And taking out anger
On those that .... love me?
I know in my conscience
Its all down to me never easy
When I look in the mirror
And only see enemy.
And I'd like to return to your laughter
Long for your smile, your energy, your guts
I hope that somewhere your inside me
Soon to come home and re-unite us
It seems like to long I've been waiting
Chained to the comfort of loneliness
Pray that your still a part of me
And soon to come home and re-unite us.
Please come home soon and re-unite us.
Find all you need in your mind, If you take the time
hey spadge,
sweet sentiment here. first off, title has got to go. it does nothing for the song. maybe, "why is this so hard" "so hard" "lonliness" "come home" just throwing out some ideas.
We swathed us in bubble-wrap don't like the word swathed
Looking to smash things didn't care for the word smash
Its all down to me never easystumbled over the wording here Long for your smile, your energy, your gutsthe word guts seems a little gorey, out of place with the sweet sentiment.
i like to story, understand it all the way through. flows fairly nice.
there are a few lines that are good imagery.Chained to the comfort of loneliness And I'd like to return to your innocence
To be vunerable again. and able to trust With a pen in our hands
And regrets in our head
nice overall job.
-CheapThrill
hey spadge:)
I think that title is awesome though it doesn't really fit the song except in the sense of you might never sent your letter? (it would fit my song for this week though :lol: )
as for the song.. I also liked these lines right away:
And I'd like to return to your innocence
To be vunerable again. and able to trust
also cool: The emptiest of promises.
:D bluenightangel
...feel like Nick is watching me over my shoulder looking for my constructive criticism...which isn't in here...yet...I'm a bit in a hurry, I'll try to look at this later on and find something better I can say:)
"oh, eventually it will break your heart" - anders wendin
