Hey this just kinda happend today but im pretty happy with it so far. The theme is kind of burning bridges though i dont say that explicitly. Ill post a mp3 tomorrowA E B7 E
how many nights must I lie awake waiting
A E B7 E
for a sound or a sign of a wandering love
A E B7 E
and how many lights can be dim but not fading
A E B7 E
before love trickles down through the leak up above
D#dim(5714) E D#dim E
How many times did I hear your voice calling
but I turned a deaf ear as I was turnin' my back
But my thoughts are all tied and my hopes are all falling
and someone to catch them is all I lack
How many times can I hear my heart breaking
before i wise up and just never get cut
But with the blood drippin down oh the pictures I am painting
Ill leave it wide open and never to shut
And im watchin you leave but im not too worried
Cause somehow ive always been drawn to you
I know just where to go theres no need to hurry
In the pictures I painted, in the places you drew
And in a lifetime maybe well pass on a streetcar
but a quick glance and avoidance is all I'll see
and we brush for a moment on our way to the exit
and Ill watch you walk away from me
"And above all, respond to all questions regarding a given song's tonal orientation in the following manner: Hell, it don't matter just kick it off!"
-Chris Thile
Chord progression works great for the verses, but how are you playing the D#dim? And what's (5714(?) I have huge hands, I've tried playing that as a chord and there's no way I can do it.......
:D :D :D
Vic
"Sometimes the beauty of music can help us all find strength to deal with all the curves life can throw us." (D. Hodge.)
those are intervals not positions, its not too far off from an open E major. Maybe ill get this recorded in a minute.
I dunno is that line really that weird? I dunno if its noticable being played well see.
edit: No I need a little time with this one sorry haha, im thinkin about switching it to D so I can sing it better.
"And above all, respond to all questions regarding a given song's tonal orientation in the following manner: Hell, it don't matter just kick it off!"
-Chris Thile
Nice song Dneck, i really likes it.
The phrasing and meter all works well but some of the metaphors are a bit strange.
Quote:
before love trickles down through the leak up above
As a metaphor it doesn't seem to work that well, it almost makes love sound a little unpleasant, like an annoying drip. Or perhaps it is just reminding me of when our roof sprung a leak
Actually I quite liked this line. For me it just paints a very clear picture of a lonely guy lay awake at night with a leaky roof. If anything, it feels a bit like this sums up how low the guy is feeling, the idea that he is looking for love to trickle in from wherever.
I struggle with the meter at a couple of points in this, but I don't think i'm very good at stuff like that yet. Would love to here it so i can get a feel for how you get it 2 flow :)
Tony
I agree with Tony here ...
Love can hurt Peter ..
But I agree with you Peter when you said you will be looking forward to the MP3
So am I
L.K
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