First, thanks Nick for the neat numbering system. I stole it from ya. 4.2 That is lots easier.
This has been my worse week since my mother died when I was 12. The picture if of her. I based my inspiration on her because she is the one that guided my spirituality when I was a boy. That is something I am trying hard to lean on this week.
This is very much a rough draft but I wanted to get it in before my normal Saturday, queak it in, kind of thing. I will be posting an MP3 soon.
Thanks
Geoo
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Promise Land
In the quiet early morning
The stillness of the night
A young boy weeping softly
for his mother who had died
And just then in an instant
her spirit takes him by the hand
And whispers to him softly
I'll show you the promised land
Through my daily journeys
I've fallen now and then
She always helps me stand up
Start walking once again
I've never claimed perfection
or said I've done no wrong
But with every mis-stepped moment
She helped to lead me home
Now as a grown man
Children of my own
A better understanding
of my spirit and my soul
I know its the lord that leads her
And takes her by the hand
He takes me by the other one
towards the promised land
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May he guide me always.
Geoo
“The hardest thing in life is to know which bridge to cross and which to burn” - David Russell (Scottish classical Guitarist. b.1942)
Hey Man you made me cry.
She was a pretty lady and it sounds like she
gave you a lifetime of Learning in those 12 years.
I might make one suggestion thoughThrough my daily journeys
I've fallen now and again
She always helps me stand up
Start walking once again
In this part you Rhyme again with again.
Maybe if tried something like:
"I've fallen now and then"
Just a thought
John
"I've fallen now and then"
Just a thought
John
Humm, its says that on m copy.. Sure your eyes werent blurry from crying? :roll: Just teasin.. Thanks for the idea. Thats much better. I am playing around with D G A.. but makes it sounds hoakie.
Geoo
“The hardest thing in life is to know which bridge to cross and which to burn” - David Russell (Scottish classical Guitarist. b.1942)
Ok i absolutly love it but my only problem with it is this( and this is jsut my opinoin ) i thnk it is more like a poem than a song, granted it doesnt have music yet but on first read that is the impression i get. I think it would be an amazing piece of poetry and i can tell it is truly heartfelt and inspired, beautifully written. a great job well done otherwise
until next time
spencer
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actually i take it back when i put it to some music it sounded quite good, if u dont mind id like to take a stab at recording a version i have for it? is that cool
chec out my music
http://www.myspace.com/spencerbeasleymusic
pm if u like it or send me a message on myspace
i thnk it is more like a poem than a song
I think thats cause I was trying to leave out a chorus just to be different but after trying to put music to it, it sounds like a hymnal. I think I will work on a chorus.. but its going to be tomorrow.
Geoo
“The hardest thing in life is to know which bridge to cross and which to burn” - David Russell (Scottish classical Guitarist. b.1942)
actually i take it back when i put it to some music it sounded quite good, if u dont mind id like to take a stab at recording a version i have for it? is that cool
You bet.. that flatters me everytime.. as long as people credit my part in it.. I would nearly always say go with it.
Geoo
“The hardest thing in life is to know which bridge to cross and which to burn” - David Russell (Scottish classical Guitarist. b.1942)
geoo, this was just amazing. The only thing I can think of mentioning is already suggested by John. Other than that, I thought this was great! Looking forward to hearing it, both yours and beans.
:)
-man
"I wish there was an over the counter test for my loneliness"
Geoo
great writting here well done keep up this terrific stuff ....
really good old mate really good
Aghhhh
Not only am I a senior citizen
I'm now a bloody senior member
Are you people trying to tell me I'm old or what ?
over 700 posts ( I really do need to get out more )
Geoo,
I really loved this! Nothing I would change or add, can't wait to hear this.
excellent stuff geoo, got a lump in my throat reading it
Immature? Of course I'm immature Einstein, I'm 50 and in a Rock and ROll band.
New Band site http://www.myspace.com/guidedbymonkeys
Nothing much to add except I pretty much agree with everyone else...tried it out in DGand A, it does have a gospelly feel to it, but I played about with a couple of minor chords and it sounded more bluesy...tried fingerpicking, it sounded different again....you've written a song that could be done in a lot of different styles, I'll be interested to see how it turns out....
:D :D :D
Vic
"Sometimes the beauty of music can help us all find strength to deal with all the curves life can throw us." (D. Hodge.)
Hi geoo,
you can add me to the growing list a fans, this is great, well done mate :D . I cant wait for mp3's.
cheers
pbee
