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(@maxwell)
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Wishes
Copyright (c)2004 Martin Hillman

I got my wish for a pretty wife
Oh she looked so nice
But underneath her plastic smile
Beat a heart as cold as ice
She took me for my automobile
She took me for my cash
She took me for one heck of a ride
and dropped me on my..
back porch

chorus:
Be careful what you wish for
It just might come to you
Chew you up and spit you out
Leave you black and blue

I wished for my freedom
now freedoms all I got
In this dark dusty alley
In my cardboard box
I could wish for money
I could wish for fame
I make no more wishes
'cuz all they bring is pain

chorus:
So be careful what you wish for
It just might come to you
Chew you up and spit you out
Leave you black and blue

He not busy being born is busy dying. - Bob Dylan (It's Alright Ma, I'm Only Bleeding)


   
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(@spadge)
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Cool.

Excellent chorus.

I like it.

Find all you need in your mind, If you take the time


   
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 Celt
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Maxwell,

Good song.I took a similar path on the assignment myself.

The only fault I find is where is the third wish? I suppose I should say second wish because the last verse sums things up quite well.

Maybe if you had the character wish for something to ease his pain.
You know drugs, alcohol ,gambling, women, all of the above.

Works well just leaves me wanting to hear more of the story.

Celt

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(@scratchmonkey)
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Works well just leaves me wanting to hear more of the story.

Me too, Max. Although, I have to say, I really like that last verse. But it could use another verse in the middle. There's all kinds of things that could fill that. Success, wealth, ambition, power, etc.... Whaddya say, man, give us another.

-- Scratch 8)

-- Scratch 8)


"...if heartaches were commercials, we'd all be on TV" -- John Prine
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(@cheapthrill)
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hey max,

*sitting at the edge of her seat* i'm waiting, come on, i know you have a third wish somewhere. you started something so wonderful now you have to finish it. i like the idea of talking about how his wishes turned out to be negative in the long run. that was the initial idea that i thought of. will have to keep on thinkin'.
But underneath her plastic smile Chew you up and spit you out
Leave you black and blue 'cuz all they bring is painthese are some wondergul lines. great images. would like to hear one more verse of them.

don't hold out on us now, :( that would just be mean.

-CheapThrill


   
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(@smokindog)
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8) 8) Love it! very nice, I like a tune that don't have a happy ending :twisted: Just one more verse!
BTW I checked out your sound click page, very cool! :D I keep my tunes there as well. You can get a creative commons copy rite for your songs as well. creativecommons.org ---check out my page--smokindog. :D

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 Bob
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Hi Maxwell

Great song - again not quite tight to the assignment but in this case no worries. Fills the regret part of wishes really well.

Love it

bob :)

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