Grew up to the Beatles, All you need is Love
Wore out that old forty-five learning all the words
Played it over and over in my room late at night
Til my mother's wrath I heard
Love the music, love the song
sit and listen all night long
sometimes got to sing along
Love the music, love the song
Found out who Clapton was the year I turned Twenty-one
Switched jobs five times the year that Grandpa died
I heard the Unplugged version
Tears in Heaven and I cried
Love the music, love the song
sit and listen all night long
sometimes got to sing along
Love the music, love the song
(?another verse :?: )[/img]
"Da*n your bolt-brained bearings!" Rod Gallowglass to his faithful, epileptic robot, Fess.
"As you wander through life, wherever you go, keep your eye on the donut and not on the hole." -- Paul Osteen (brother of Joel Osteen)
Hi Mikeo
I have only one gripe with this ..
I heard the Unplugged version
I personally would like that line to be about your grandpa
It then gives the listener 2 lines about Eric and 2 lines on your Grandpa
Off the top of my head and please don't be offended
"Found out who Clapton was the year I turned Twenty-one
Switched jobs five times the year that Grandpa died
Never thought I'd miss you so , now I know your still the one
As I listened to Tears in Heaven I cried ...I cried "
Just my thoughts
Hilch :?:
Here is to you as good as you are
And here is to me as bad as I am
As good as you are and as bad as I am
I'm as good as you are as bad as I am
Thanks guys.
"Da*n your bolt-brained bearings!" Rod Gallowglass to his faithful, epileptic robot, Fess.
"As you wander through life, wherever you go, keep your eye on the donut and not on the hole." -- Paul Osteen (brother of Joel Osteen)
Hi Mike
Certainly a good start- chorus is well written. Problem with the last line of the first verse is it's not how we speak. That Iambic pentameter is usually more prevalent in poetry than in song lyrics and when it occurs in song lyrics it seems awkward.
Nice verse on the grandpa although I'd just make the second line something like
In the same year my grandpa died
Otherwise good stuff :wink:
Bob
You are what you eat, eat well
It's all off the top of my head (and Lord knows there's not much left there... :lol: )
"Da*n your bolt-brained bearings!" Rod Gallowglass to his faithful, epileptic robot, Fess.
"As you wander through life, wherever you go, keep your eye on the donut and not on the hole." -- Paul Osteen (brother of Joel Osteen)
