Had actually half written this already, shortly after i fell out with ma parents n decided 2 stay at uni over summer.
My Life
I should go out, I should scream I should shout
I don't want to
The shoes on my feet, should be walkin' the street
They don't want to
So while you are here, could you grab me a beer
If you want to
Don't care what yoou say, gonna sit here all day
'Cos I want to
There's a whole world out there, should get outta this chair
I don't want to
Go out and live life, just this once throw the dice
I don't want to
The look in your eyes, says you're so disappointed
In me
Says I'd do what you said, if I'd just use my head
I don't want to
It's my____ life
It's my____ life
It's my life
It's my life
All these things have gone wrong, I can't fix with a song
Though i want to
Sit lonely at home, just can't pick up the phone
But I want to
As I sit here confused, still I try to explain
To myself
That it's never too late, but my pride is at stake
And it's no use
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As always, all comments greatly appreciated, although i may not read them for a week or so as I'm off on me hols on saturday :-)
Tony
Hi Tony, and belated welcomes to A) Guitarnoise and B) the SSG.....
Somehow Mr Melancholy slipped by me last week - I didn't see it, but at the time of writing, it's right underneath this post.... so i had a look, reads OK to me, and I like MR FIXIT's (PBee's!) suggestions.....
This one looks good too, but please - don't write in text, as if you're messaging someone, I hate getting text messages, takes me too long to translate them - English is the Lingua Franca here, use it properly and you'll be taken more seriously ... especially by the older members.....
Should be fairly easy to put music to, I can sort of see/hear this as an ascending riff - G/A/D, F/C/Bb. or something along those lines - what have you got in mind?
Hey, two weeks, two decent songs already - keep going mate!
:D :D :D
Vic
"Sometimes the beauty of music can help us all find strength to deal with all the curves life can throw us." (D. Hodge.)
Hi Tony, and belated welcomes to A) Guitarnoise and B) the SSG.....
This one looks good too, but please - don't write in text, as if you're messaging someone, I hate getting text messages, takes me too long to translate them - English is the Lingua Franca here, use it properly and you'll be taken more seriously ... especially by the older members.....
Yeah, that's a fair point. A bad habit more than anything, but I shall do my best to abstain in the future :wink:
With respect to music, as I said, this was kind of half written before i saw this weeks assignment. Originally it was intended as an almost upbeat rebellious song, basically "You might be right and I might be wrong but i don't care". I gave the song a pretty strong driving rhythm, all just on an open G chord, and then 2 staccato strums on the C at the end of each line. The third 'couplet' of each verse replaces the G with an Am and then just adding putting my little finger on the 3rd fret of top e at for the 2 staccato strums ( 02213 no idea what this is, my theory is virtually non-existant). Not sure I've explained all that amazingly well, but i don't have any way of recording at the moment, so that's about the best I can do.
Tony
Hi Tony
This is good mate , I agree with Vic though ( the text thing I have no idea what He said after that )
English is the Lingua Franca here I'm pretty sure there would be an Aussie saying for that ( if I understood it ) :lol: :lol: :lol: :lol: ( joke Vic)
Hilch :?:
Here is to you as good as you are
And here is to me as bad as I am
As good as you are and as bad as I am
I'm as good as you are as bad as I am
and I like MR FIXIT's (PBee's!) suggestions.....
geez Vic I'm getting a complex :(
Tony, I really like this song, it's defintely different, its a shame you can't record it cos I would really like to hear it. Id like to no how you deal with the pseudo conversation youve got going in there with every alternate line, I just think that's great.
cheers
Paul
Thank you Vic
I am really struggling here ,
I like the beer line
That brought a smile
Nice song , and please English for this old fart please
L.K
Aghhhh
Not only am I a senior citizen
I'm now a bloody senior member
Are you people trying to tell me I'm old or what ?
over 700 posts ( I really do need to get out more )
