Popped in saw the prompt and this hit me a couple of days later
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Chorus
G6 Am7 Fmaj7 C
After the relationship fades, after the fantasies of life subside
G6 Am7 Fmaj7 C
After the laughter in a fake conversation, after the relationship fades
Verse 1
G6 Am7 Fmaj7 C
We had lunch we had laughs Warm spicy pasta tasted so sweet
G6 Am7 Fmaj7 C
Sharing drinks songs and sagas seemed it would never end
Repeat chorus
Verse 2
G6 Am7 Fmaj7 C
We shared stories of struggles We shared triumphs over rebel troubles
G6 Am7 Fmaj7 C
Touching the moon sun and stars astral energy vibrations together
Repeat chorus
Bridge
G6 Am7 Fmaj7 C
What seemed like a connection was just conjecture
G6 Am7 Fmaj7 C
What seemed like friendship was just something in common
G6 Am7 Fmaj7 C
What seemed like love was just an unrequieted longing
G6 Am7 Fmaj7 C
After a long time ago
Hi Andy,
Nice job :D ....part of me wants to reject it, because it doesn't fit the status quo of melody and section layouts, but a bigger part keeps interested and intrigued to hear what will happen next.
....sounds like you are developing more in your own style....and that's a good thing :wink:
V2 and the chorus seem to contradict.
V2 seems like sincere conversation, but the chorus (and v3) say all the talk was one "fake conversation" and "conjecture"
....so I, as a listener, I can not really connect emotionally because I don't have a clear sense of what's going on....was the singer justified? delusional? fooled? mistaken?.....is the singer bitter? accepting? blaming?....I can't tell
Thanks for sharing.
James
....so I, as a listener, I can not really connect emotionally because I don't have a clear sense of what's going on....was the singer justified? delusional? fooled? mistaken?.....is the singer bitter? accepting? blaming?
Neither does the singer while grieving the losses, so the answer is yes to all....any..... or none...... of the above....at different points in time :D
James, thanks for the listen and comment.
Andy
I haven't updated the recording yet (am thinking of adding some midi strings). Upon reflection at the end of the bridge I added:
Grieving the lost and loses
After the relationship fades
I played it at the local singer-songwriter circle. James, thanks again! :D
When I read through the lyrics I thought they would be hard to sing, but they fit the music. Nice guitar work too.
I'm with James on the confusion. There doesn't seem to be any explanation for the falling out. It's also not clear whether this is a casual acquaintance, a friend, or a lover. The bridge doesn't help to clarify.
Renee
I don't look for plot clarity or completeness. I'm more interested in word and chord play. I do understand the story.
Great lines:
What seemed like a connection was just conjecture
What seemed like friendship was just something in common
What seemed like love was just an unrequited longing
I like the fact that you stepped out of having all major and minor chords.
When I read through the lyrics I thought they would be hard to sing, but they fit the music. Nice guitar work too.
Thanks Hobson!
I'm with James on the confusion. There doesn't seem to be any explanation for the falling out. It's also not clear whether this is a casual acquaintance, a friend, or a lover. The bridge doesn't help to clarify.
Yes it's same feeling in some ways for all three.
I don't look for plot clarity or completeness. I'm more interested in word and chord play. I do understand the story.
Great lines:
What seemed like a connection was just conjecture
What seemed like friendship was just something in common
What seemed like love was just an unrequited longing
I like the fact that you stepped out of having all major and minor chords.
Thanks John, that's was I was going for. Along with starting from noodling using part of the cycle of fifths (F-C-G) and a repeating progression that felt like a rolling key change, even though it really is all in C.
Andy