Close
Skip to content

Forum

SSG Y12W6 Before Th...
 
Notifications
Clear all

SSG Y12W6 Before There's an After


(@jamestoffee)
Famed Member
Joined: 13 years ago
Posts: 2852
Topic starter  

SSG Y12W6 Before There's an After

http://soundclick.com/share.cfm?id=12600675

======Revised Version=====

My buttons kept popping; bursting at the seams
Those hand-me-down clothes couldn’t hold my dreams
Down home fun found a new avenue
Gonna live my life in full view

Chorus
Before there’s an after
Before there’s an after
You’re gonna know my name
You’re gonna know my name
Before there’s an after

I’m stepping out dancing in my attitude
Sometimes it hurts breaking in new shoes
But growing pains don’t mean disaster
Gonna fill my life with laughter

chorus

Rap
Look who’s at the party Miss 21
When you come of age you’re a loaded gun
Spread those wings reach and touch the sun
Before there’s an after you’ve gotta have fun

chorus

Now don’t try to fit me in Obama care
I bought a new hat for my morning hair
I’ve got a row of silver buttons down my dress
They’ll be yours if you say yes but

chorus

======Original Version=====

I’m popping old buttons; bursting at the seams
These hand-me-down clothes can’t hold my dreams
Down home fun found a new avenue
Gonna live my life in full view

Chorus
Before there’s an after
Before there’s an after
You’re gonna know my name
You’re gonna know my name
Before there’s an after

I’m stepping out dancing in my attitude
Sometimes it hurts breaking in new shoes
But growing pains can come with laughter
Gonna fill my life with what really matters

chorus

rap
Lookin’ like forever 21
When you come of age you’re a loaded gun
Spread those wings reach and touch the sun
Before there’s an after you’ve gotta have fun

chorus

Now don’t try to fit me in Obama care
I’ve got a brand new hat for my morning hair
I’ve got a row of silver buttons down my dress
They’ll be yours if you say yes but

chorus


Quote
(@hobson)
Prominent Member
Joined: 13 years ago
Posts: 794
 

James, thanks for making me feel old. I don't know what the song is about and I don't like the music. :? And get off my lawn!

Seriously, I can't comment on the music because it's a style that doesn't appeal to me.

As far as the lyrics, there seem to be some contradictions or maybe just some lines that could be clearer. The first verse is about old clothes. In other verses there are new shoes and a new hat.

Instead of this:
I’m popping old buttons; bursting at the seams
These hand-me-down clothes can’t hold my dreams

How about this:
I've been popping old buttons; bursting at the seams
Those hand-me-down clothes couldn't hold my dreams

The line "Lookin’ like forever 21" makes me think of someone who is older trying to look young, while "When you come of age you’re a loaded gun" makes me think of someone who has just turned 21.

I'm not clear on what the "after" is. After the dance? After the singer spends the night with somebody that she picks up?

What does Obamacare have to do with the rest of the song?

Renee


ReplyQuote
(@jamestoffee)
Famed Member
Joined: 13 years ago
Posts: 2852
Topic starter  

James, thanks for making me feel old. I don't know what the song is about and I don't like the music. And get off my lawn!
Great rant!

Well I guess the mission was accomplished....somewhat. The target audience was for late teens/early 20s to be sung by an R&B diva type but generic enough to cross genres.......
Seriously, I can't comment on the music because it's a style that doesn't appeal to me.

I was going for a modern R&B swing type feel.
How about this:
I've been popping old buttons; bursting at the seams
Those hand-me-down clothes couldn't hold my dreams

Better, thanks.
The line "Lookin’ like forever 21" makes me think of someone who is older trying to look young, while "When you come of age you’re a loaded gun" makes me think of someone who has just turned 21.

Changed I'm not clear on what the "after" is. After the dance? After the singer spends the night with somebody that she picks up?

The after is after whatever is BIG in someone's life....dance, relationship, fame, etc...whatever life events people start reliving in their minds......it's a coming of age song with the metaphor of getting new clothes is a new stage in life.
What does Obamacare have to do with the rest of the song?

Probably not enough....I was trying to show that while "adults" are debating and concerned over current hot topics like health care, young adults probably think very little about such concerns....the most serious health issue could be "morning hair" for the young and healthy.

Thanks for the listen and feedback; especially when it wasn't an enjoyable experience for you.

James


ReplyQuote
(@hobson)
Prominent Member
Joined: 13 years ago
Posts: 794
 

You didn't change the posted lyrics here or on Soundclick. I think that the revised lyrics in your recording flow better. Also, I find the revised recording more musical. Not sure what you changed. I think the original recording had some sort of background vocals that to me didn't fit the rest of the music.

Renee


ReplyQuote
(@jamestoffee)
Famed Member
Joined: 13 years ago
Posts: 2852
Topic starter  

Thanks, Renee. I got the revised lyrics up now


ReplyQuote
(@andygetch)
Reputable Member
Joined: 10 years ago
Posts: 328
 

Hi James,
Admittedly I don't know much about current pop music either, the only time I hear it is when I'm in stores or getting my haircut, melodyne and predictable rhymes . I'm wondering about the tempo, especially in the rap section. I'm reminded a bit of the 80's Blondie song "Rapture" (now its an oldie) where the catchy rap verses are spoken much faster than the chorus is sung

http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=pHCdS7O248g

Andy

http://www.soundclick.com/bands/default.cfm?bandID=1228093


ReplyQuote
(@jamestoffee)
Famed Member
Joined: 13 years ago
Posts: 2852
Topic starter  

Hi Andy,
I'm reminded a bit of the 80's Blondie song "Rapture" (now its an oldie)

Ah, yes. Good reference :)

Thanks for the listen and post!

James


ReplyQuote