After reading this weeks assigment description, I went away, wrote a few things, etc. It's only when I've looked at the assignment again now that I realise it was supposed to be based on our own routine, whereas my song is about another person. If it doesn't fir in with this week, apologies!
Daily Routine (now you're gone)
I open my eyes to another rainy day
Think to myself “Why won't this feeling go away?â€
‘Cos I'm so lost without you here
And I don't know how
To carry on anymore
My eyes adjust as the light comes creeping in
See the empty space beside me, where your body should have been
Its so cold without you here
And I don't how
To carry on anymore
‘Cos now you're gone and all that I can see
Is the darkened sky surrounding
Everything that could have been
An' Every day's just the same old routine
Trying not to think about you
But you're my every thought
And each one in between
Drivin' down the highway as I have done every day
Just praying for redemption, from this life that's gone astray
But even God seems to forsake me
And I don't think I
Can carry on anymore
Going though the motions in a job, left unfulfilled
Wondering if anyone would miss me, if I crashed my car, was killed?
‘Cos without you I'm just a no-one
And I don't think I
Can carry on anymore
Now you're gone and all that I can see
Is the darkened sky surrounding
Everything that could have been
An' Every day's just the same old routine
Trying not to think about you
But you're my every thought
And each one in between
Back down the highway as I have done every night
Don't pay attention to my driving, don't switch on my high-beam lights
My eyes well up, I feel it
This is it
I just can't go on anymore
Drifted across the freeway haven't done this one before
Let go of the steering wheel, but push the pedal to the floor
Close my eyes, take in the silence
You're my final thoughts
After this there are no more
Any comments welcomed as allways
Pete
ETD - Formerly "10141748 - Reincarnate"
After reading this weeks assigment description, I went away, wrote a few things, etc. It's only when I've looked at the assignment again now that I realise it was supposed to be based on our own routine, whereas my song is about another person. If it doesn't fir in with this week, apologies!
To me it works well with the assignment. Maybe because I was thinking in a similar direction.
I'm not going to nitpick this song. My gut reaction is that this is very good and that's where I'll leave it. I can feel it.
Hi Pete
This is pretty darn good mate , I am just wondering about your themes of songs lately very sort of missing someone special ...{ am I wrong ?}
I would love to read a up beat song you real soon ...
Trev...
Here is to you as good as you are
And here is to me as bad as I am
As good as you are and as bad as I am
I'm as good as you are as bad as I am
Thanks for the replies, guys.
And B-Rock, you're right on the money there
As a Uni student living 250 miles away from home, I obviously miss my family and friends from back home (at present its been nearly 12 weeks since I was home), so that must be what is showing itself through my writing.
I also had someone new come into my life recently, and I miss her like crazy when she's not around
(My last song, Stephanie, was about her)
I'll try to make the next one a bit happier, ok? :D
Pete
ETD - Formerly "10141748 - Reincarnate"
I like it, Pete.....
OK it's down-beat, the only other song I can think of - off the top of my head - where the narrator dies is "Streets of Laredo" by Marty Robbins......but yeah, it fits the topic well enough, it's all about life being one long sad routine.....
OK to the thing that's really bugging me - you drive on A-roads, B-roads, country lanes, or motorways - THERE ARE NO FREEWAYS IN BRITAIN!........just kidding, but you know what I mean - I hope!
Actually there is one other thing that's bothering me....if you die at the end of this song, how are you going to write one next week? Unless you've already anticipated the subject and got it on time-delay-posting......
Just kidding again, seriously, this is a good piece of writing, "Freeway" is about the only thing I'd change - not sure what musical genre it'd fit in though, any thoughts as to music?
:D :D :D
Vic
"Sometimes the beauty of music can help us all find strength to deal with all the curves life can throw us." (D. Hodge.)
Hi Pete
It was only after reading this I looked at your details on the left of the post tosee you are based in Luton in the UK. Made the reference to highways and freeways jar alittle as Vic points out but doesn't detract in any way from what is a fairly powerful piece of self examination. The theme of having to face the daily grind having lost the one part of it which made it bearable is a good take on this week's topic hence dark and downbeat works with the mood of the piece.
Good stuff
Bob :wink:
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