SSG11-Week 7 We Bring Our Offering

Hi James

Once again, nice work. I can certainly here this being done at worship services nowadays. I wouldn't be surprised if someone at some point asked your permission to use this.

Two things - the only line I worry about (not overly so) is the "you are worthy of so much more" at near the end of the first verse. In and of itself it's fine but in the context of the song (and it just may be me bopping around to the perky beat) it seems a little, I don't know, unworthy of either God or the narrator. Maybe
Remembering what You’ve done before
We can only wish to give You more

or maybe:
Remembering what You’ve done before
You hold our souls and so much more

Just a thought. The other thought would be to change "an offering" to either "this offering" or "our offering" simply to make it a specific rather than a generic giving. Again, it's terribly minor and I could easily make a case for it remaining just as it is.

Again, thank you for a pleasant start to the week. Looking forward to more.

Peace

Hi David,
Remembering what You’ve done before
You hold our souls and so much more
I like this idea :mrgreen:
either "this offering" or "our offering"
I like the more specific of "our"....it's a bit harder to sing, but I like the sound and bit of struggle on the word.

Thanks for the feedback and suggestions :D

James

Very good original Christmas song. Merry Christmas to you and peace on earth to all.

Thanks, MrEWorm.

Merry Christmas to you!

James

James, like David, I can see this as a worship song being used at a service and can picture people singing along to it. Very nice.

The revised lyrics are better. I have no suggestions. It all works.

Thanks, Renee, for the listen and post :D

-James