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 pbee
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OK folks I'm going to take some artistic license here. Vic when you say political figure, I think not only in the party political sense of the word, but of all or any individuals that influence politics (even political footballs). So this song is inspired by one of the above :wink:

This song is also my first ever reggae song

http://soundclick.com/share.cfm?id=12659949

Watching listening
© 2014 Copyright Paul Brady

Do you know they're watching you
watching all the things you do from
the first step in the morning to the
last breath as you lay your head down

You know they're watching you
You know they're watching me too

Do you know they're listening
listening to the things you say to
your sisters and your brothers the
people that you talk to everyday

You know they're listening to you
You know they're listening to me too

But do we really want to know
know the tune that the whistle blows
We turn our head toward the flag
turn our back to the price we pay

You know they know you
You know they know me too

Yeah they know us through and through
Which is why they can do the things they do

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Do you know they're watching you
watching all the things you do from
the first step in the morning to the
last breath as you lay your head down

You know they're watching you
You know they're watching me too

Do you know they're listening
they're listening to the things you say to
your sisters and your brothers and the
people that you talk to every day

You know they're listening to you
You know they're listening to me too

But do we really want to know
know the tune the whistle blows away
The way we hide behind a flag
we don’t understand the price we pay

You know they know you
You know they know me too
You know they know us
Which is why they can do the things they do


Check out my Reverbnation page here


   
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(@jamestoffee)
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Hi Paul,

Looks like the repetition is working well. The topic seems general enough that you could make it specific or not in an speaking intro before the song playing live.

I was thinking about painting lyrics in broad generic strokes as well; having little to know interest in politics.

I look forward to the listen 8)

James


   
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(@sunnydunes)
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Nice job, I'd love to hear a recording!

For a proper protest song, if that is what you're after, I would end with some call to action. Protesting the government, or maybe just putting a sticker over your webcam... Or you could end with a future in which we are not being spied upon. And all of that without using any big words which take away from the laid-back reggae feel...


   
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(@john-sargent)
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Ahhhh the NSA.


   
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(@hobson)
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I like the fact that it's vague. In thinking about this week's topic, I came to the conclusion that if you want a song to endure, you might not want to include the name of a well-known person.

I particularly like this verse, maybe because it took me a minute to understand it:

But do we really want to know
know the tune the whistle blows away
The way we hide behind a flag
we don’t understand the price we pay

I don't see this as a protest song.

Renee


   
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Hey Mr Brady :)
Naturally I don't know how fast or the melody you have for this so this might be totally wrong - This is how I keep reading it :)

Do you know they're watching you
watching all the things you do
from the first step in the morning
to the last breath [*in the evening] < My little edit ...

I really like this song in progress Paul , that was my only little query :)
Love reading your work
Trev :note2: :note2: :note2: :note2: :note2:

Here is to you as good as you are
And here is to me as bad as I am
As good as you are and as bad as I am
I'm as good as you are as bad as I am


   
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 pbee
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Thanks all for the comments. I'm working on the mp3 but its a few days out yet as I've been practicing for a gig tonight. "Castles in the sky" makes it's public debut :shock: so I really want to get it right. I've also made a couple of minor edits.


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 pbee
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I've uploaded an mp3 here

http://soundclick.com/share.cfm?id=12659949

cheers

Paul


Check out my Reverbnation page here


   
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Loving the MP3 Paul -
Makes me want to chill out mon ( :D :D )
Love listening to your guitar playing and singing :)

Great job :note1: :note2: :note2: :note1: :note2: :note2:

Here is to you as good as you are
And here is to me as bad as I am
As good as you are and as bad as I am
I'm as good as you are as bad as I am


   
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Loving the MP3 Paul -
Makes me want to chill out mon ( :D :D )
Love listening to your guitar playing and singing :)

Great job :note1: :note2: :note2: :note1: :note2: :note2:

+1


   
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 pbee
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Thanks Trev and James for the listen.

I really like this song so will re-master it and tighten up the timing of all the instruments. Also I'll re-record the ending so that it stops on the last line, which is how I tend to play it live.

cheers

Paul


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Sorry to catch up with this one so late! Great song, Paul. Can't believe it's your first ever reggae style - did a great job!

Peace


   
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 pbee
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Thanks David,
my son showed me how to do that strum the same weekend Vic posted the assignment, so I thought I'd strike while the iron was hot so to speak, I'm very pleased :D .

Paul


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