my attendance here, as usual, has been abismal but to try and get back in the swing of things i've finished off a draft of a previous assignment that never got completed, though you'd probably have guessed that from the salamander ;)
also i didnt know this before the previous task so i'm guessing that you dont but apparently salamander can mean an elemental spirit that lives in fire.
anyways here it is:
Fire's Shadow
The night is dark and dangerous
The night is dark and dangerous
The night is dark and dangerous
But we were doomed by the faithless
We paid for protection
With generous devotions
To keep the night away
Until the light of day
The night is dark and dangerous
But that's not when they came for us
The night is dark and dangerous
But we were doomed by the faithless
They rose from the embers
Faithless Salamanders
With their long fiery tongues
To burn out everyone
The night is dark and dangerous
But that's not when they came for us
The night is dark and dangerous
But we were doomed by the faithless
Senses attuned to the dawn
Nobody saw them come
With such a momentum
That no one could stop them
The night is dark and dangerous
But that's not when they came for us
The night is dark and dangerous
But we were doomed by the faithless
We thought they were saviours
But they were destroyers
They left dark all around
Black ash covering the ground
The night is dark and dangerous
But that's not when they came for us
The night is dark and dangerous
But we were doomed by the faithless
any comments/criticisms much appreciated
cheers
rob:)
hey rob:)
yeah do remember that salamander :wink: must have seen it somewhere before, crouching behind my door... sorry got stuck in AABB;)
as far as the assignment is concerned I think you did not follow it very consequently, as not all parts go like AABB, but then again I dunno if the whole song has to be AABB or if the chorus can be different. anyway I'd be the last person to criticise you for not following a certain pattern. :lol:
apart from that your song appeals to me in a way, I like the feeling I get from it though I cannot put it into words. I also like the way 'the night is dark and dangerous'(quite beautiful statement) reappears again and again(though not in AABB but what the hell).
overall I really like it. good work.
bluenightangel
...was it salamander, momentum, attuned to? weren't it some more? :wink:
"oh, eventually it will break your heart" - anders wendin
