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SSG5 Week 51 - In the Twinkling of Blacks Lights

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SlowPlay
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Hey all,

I've always wished I could write like straycat, so I figured if I started with a chorus that she wrote, I would already be 50% of the way there. I think I might be at 51% right now. I modified the chorus a little bit to make it fit the melody in my head.

Feel free to listen at:
http://www.soundclick.com/bands/songInfo.cfm?bandID=337003&songID=5908005

In The Twinkling of Black Lights
Title: pearlthekat
Chorus lyrics: straycat
Music and verse lyrics: Robert Gowland

Can a lost language speak
With clarity?
Can lost pennies steal
Your prosperity?

It's a dead choir that you're admiring
Holes in the fabric no one will notice
Lost as we are, these are the songs
Glow in the dark, these are the songs

Deep in your mind
Memories of Hyde
Flash your vision
Out in the light
Long for retreat
Beneath your skin

It's a dead choir that you're admiring
Holes in the fabric no one will notice
Lost as we are, these are the songs
Glow in the dark, these are the songs

Blind spots will cast
Head turning lure
Solve the mystery
Far down the road
Shimmer in sight
Feel unworthy

It's a dead choir that you're admiring
Holes in the fabric no one will notice
Lost as we are, these are the songs
Glow in the dark, these are the songs

Verses:
Dm F Bb F Bb F C (x2 per couplet )

From verse to chorus:
D7

Chorus:
Em G C G (x4)

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DrunkRock
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I think whenever someone posts music with their writing, there is nothing I can say to critique them. You pulled off a dark and brooding set of lyrics extremely well.


   
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pearlthekat
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i like this. i think it's good. i'm glad someone liked my title well enough to write something around it.


   
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straycat.
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oh boy. it's beautiful! marvellous.
really, you know i love your voice, but this is .. beyond beauty:-)
i'm probably sounding quite foolish but i'm head over heels.
I've always wished I could write like straycat that's sweet (and this sounds like something i'd love to write in many places.. like the "hyde" place) but you are a great writer on your own :D
and what's more.. you can write music :D admiring you for that..

"a lost language".. :D

oh, and i like your revision of my chorus.

so.. pearthekat.. slowplay..i'd say this is one successful collaboration :D
(any chance i might get a mp3 of this?)

cheers,
straycat

"oh, eventually it will break your heart" - anders wendin


   
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pearlthekat
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somehow i didn't notice the soundclick link so i just listened now. i found myself singing along! it's really a great song. very nice. this was a good assignment!


   
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Montezuma
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Nice one.
I was tempted to have a go at the verses for this title & chorus because of the mystery and the paradox of the title which suggested a lot of potential for playing with other similar juxtaposed words - a challenging task which I gave up on.
This take on it does the job well.

It is interesting the difference it makes hearing the tune.
I very often am lukewarm to a set of lyrics then when I hear the melody I love it.
With the lyrics here I thought they were too abstract - but when I listened to the MP3 . . .
Loved it :D
Well done 8)

“Poetry and Hums aren't things which you get, they're things which get you. And all you can do is go where they can find you.” - Winnie the Pooh


   
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Bob
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Hi Rob

This definitely meets your stated intent and is a great job with some tricky lyrics here and there.

Good stuff

Bob :wink:

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pbee
 pbee
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Rob,
I've always wished I could write like straycat

if anyone here is capable of writing in a style like straycat, you are my friend. You both have a great talent for putting imagery down in a poetic way. Well done with this song, I enjoyed it very much. Actually i found myself grabbing my bass guitar and jamming along, thanks for that.

cheers

Paul


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