Is it ok if i try this? I hope so.....
1.She says I'm Green but I'm feeling Blue
2.I'm looking forward to being in your past
3.Before you even ask, the answer is yes
4.I hope that's mud on my shoes :D
5.Life gave us lemons but you make great Lemonade
I hope they are not too corny 8)
Sure. Welcome to the SSG party. Jump right on in.
It's a two way street - others here will say nice things about what you write, offer advice about what they think might work better, and sometimes even admit they don't understand it; and you should feel free to offer constructive criticism about their lyrics too. If you can post a mp3 file of your song that's even better - it's not always possible to hear in your head how someone's going to fit something like "terminological-inexactitude" into a short line.
Your lines are not corny at all. Number 2 has a wealth of possibilities and number 4 could go anywhere, which I like. We had a redneck influence pop up when it came to Week 49, and I can see number 5 joining that group.
Next up, grab the assignment for Week 49 - take five lines from the Week 48 posts that you didn't write yourself and come up with the first verse of a song from each one, so you end up with five different verses. Keep them a sensible length and not over-complicated. Then post them.
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