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bstguitarist
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OK hi everyone! nice to see most of you are still here... man I miss this, well its about 1 am EST so i'll keep it short. I wrote this in abt 15 minutes so dont expect something spectacular but all advice is welcome!

No name yet (Seriously)

(Verse One)
The foreign feeling I have felt,
Are fogging up my mind,
One thing after another,
My brain's pulling overtime.

(Verse Two)
And when I think about it,
I just can't help but say,
My mind drift into these thoughts,
So many times everyday.

(Choruse One)
Exactly just what are they?
Something I do not know,
Feelings of happiness,
Feelings of surprise.
Many times I've thought,
Bright and cheery dreams,
One thing after another,
Thoughts flowing like a stream,

(Verse Three)

Yes like a gentle stream,
Meandering through the woods,
Soft trickles of water falling,
My tracks behind me where I have stood.

(Verse Four)

These thoughts think back,
Into the colorful past,
And I remember everyday,
With a bright sunrise.

(Choruse One)
Exactly just what are they?
Something I do not know,
Feelings of happiness,
Feelings of surprise.
Many times I've thought,
Bright and cheery dreams,
One thing after another,
Thoughts flowing like a stream,

(Verse Three)
Yes like a gentle stream,
Meandering through the woods,
Soft trickles of water falling,
My tracks behind me where I have stood.

hey everyone,
bstguitarist
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Celt
 Celt
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Hey Bst

How have you been? Sorry I didn't catch your post earlier but I was very busy last week and have a tendancy to stick with the week at hand. Anyway I saw your post and couldn't let it pass with no comments .

The song is not bad at all. Maybe sometime when it's not 1:00AM you should go back and fix your tenses a little you seem to jump from past to present a couple times. I going to guess that's from trying to type when you're tired.

I only saw one mention of a bright sunrise so I can't say you did a great job on the assignment for week 19 but I like the song.

Hope to see you around a little more I miss reading your work

Take Care

Celt

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