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katreich
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The muse has been out to lunch the past few weeks. Even this one seems a bit forced to me.

Summer Solstice

Come Dance with me at the Summer Solstice
We'll strip down to nothing and sing to the moon
We'll all join hands like the Druids before us
And celebrate life in the middle of June

Come down to the seashore and wade in the water
Come splash with me in the crystal blue sea
We can lie on the sand and brown our bodies
Or nap in the shade of a leafy old tree

Come to my window some evening in summer
You can crawl up the trellis and into my room
We can lie on the bed and look out at the starlight
As we breathe in the scent of the roses perfume.

Come dance with me at the Summer Solstice
We'll strip down to nothing and sing to the moon
We'll all join hands like the druids before us
And celebrate life in the middle of June.

Kathy Reichert
6/7/06

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Joe
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I like that. Was really easy to read. One of those songs that just gives you a happy feeling. Kind of like the Beach Boys. Well done.

Joe


   
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Celt
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Kathy,

It's a pretty good song and most of it flows well.

The only part that sounded a bit forced to me was
We can lie on the sand and brown like berries
Or nap in the shade of a leafy old tree

And that's not that bad.

You did use the old Moon/June rythme but sometimes it's OK
to fall back on tradition. It works here.

John

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Spadge
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I think it's perfect

Listening to a lot of Blackmore's Night and Celtic stuff at the moment, so this resounds very well with me.

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Bob
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Hi Kat

Fairly good depiction of the summer solstice here :wink:

Reads very easily and can hear it as a folky kind of number.

Agree with Celt over those two lines - they upset the song for me.

Good stuff oherwise

Bob :wink:

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geoo
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Wow, what a beautiful description of Solstice. This is something I would want to learn and perform at a bardic circle. I completely disagree about the two lines in question. When I read it, those were the two lines that drove in the imagination for me. I could see a little video going on in my head..

Beautiful beautiful

Geoo

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katreich
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I've changed "brown like berries" to "brown our bodies". I'm still not sure which I prefer.
As far as Moon and June, I don't know how(or am not talented enough) to write about the summer solstice without using those words!

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Vic Lewis VL
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I like it - I'd love to hear Maddy Prior have a go at this! My only complaint is, I seriously think you could do with another verse....just seems a little too short, unless you're going to throw in a finger-picked solo and repeat the first verse....definitely left wanting more!

:D :D :D

Vic

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