OK here we go again 4 th time lucky or unlucky I guess , which ever way you like to look at it ... :twisted: :twisted:
This is my 4 th attempt to post this and if it gets lost this time bad bloody luck I won't be posting it again I'll just move on ...........
It's about a WW1 (World War 1 ) digger in his twilight years ( as a old man ) Looking down on the ground looking very miserable , why who knows . I thought it was fitting with remberance day coming up ( I had this thought on Monday when I originally posted it ) Rememberance day kidddies is the 11-11 of any year and we hold one minutes silence for those who gave their lives fighting during WW1 and WW2 . History lesson over ....................... I called it Looking down , all replies welcome good or bad .. maybe this time I'll get to read them ...............
LOOKING DOWN
He's a old man now
With his head looking down
But it wasn't always like this
Years ago he was young and fit
The old photograph hangs upon his wall
Thoughts of his enemies why did they fall
He was twenty years old
When he returned there was no pots of gold
He's a old man now
With his head looking down
But it wasn't always like this
Years ago he was young and fit
The war is long over
The fighting in head won't keep him sober
He is struggling with his life
And the passing of his dear wife
He's a old man now
With his head looking down
But it wasn't always like this
Years ago he was young and fit
He's a old man now
With his head looking down
But it wasn't always like this
Years ago he was young and fit
Outro..............
He lost his friends and brothers
Now feels the heart break of his mothers
They say age will not weary them
But for him it's hard to keep L I V I N G
......................................................................
The word living sung slowly and drawn out with no music
hope it's not too depressing :wink:
cheers
L.K :arrow:
Aghhhh
Not only am I a senior citizen
I'm now a bloody senior member
Are you people trying to tell me I'm old or what ?
over 700 posts ( I really do need to get out more )
Ahhh great, you managed to re-re-re-post......
I'l say what I said last time, this is a lovely tribute to those who gave their lives in WW1 and WW2....
Both myself and Alan Green picked up on the same line last time,
"Thoughts of his enemies why did they fall".....might look a little better if that was "Friends" or "Comrades", even "Brothers-in-arms" if it'd squeeze into the rhyming scheme....
I particularly liked the way you managed to quote half a Lawrence Binyon line, "They say Age shall not weary them"....
Great stuff, mate!!!!
:D :D :D
Vic
"Sometimes the beauty of music can help us all find strength to deal with all the curves life can throw us." (D. Hodge.)
thanks mate
mmm brothers in arms that has a nice take on the matter
Aghhhh
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I'm now a bloody senior member
Are you people trying to tell me I'm old or what ?
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Hey there
very good song this I agree with Vic but how would you incorporate that line into your song ???
Friends and commrades why did they fall ....
mmm nice Vic that sounds very nice and I have to say it's a very moving piece espicially when his wife passes away
that just got me all choked up .......
Well done King ( is this why you are the King ?)
hilch
Here is to you as good as you are
And here is to me as bad as I am
As good as you are and as bad as I am
I'm as good as you are as bad as I am
very poignant, would love to hear it performed
Immature? Of course I'm immature Einstein, I'm 50 and in a Rock and ROll band.
New Band site http://www.myspace.com/guidedbymonkeys
I wasn't sure if these were just typos, but you might wanna change "a old man" to "an old man" and "was no pots of gold" to "was no pot of gold." Otherwise, like the others said, nice tribute.
Joe
Hey LK.
this is great. I realy like this line
Thoughts of his enemies why did they fall
I like the fact that hes including the "other side" in his thoughts, which to me shows a maturity in him that he may not have had as a younger man, good stuff.
cheers
pbee
Thanks every one for your feed back ...
I wasn't too sure about writting after the big scare but thanks again it's like I have never been away ...
you people are wonderful thank you
Aghhhh
Not only am I a senior citizen
I'm now a bloody senior member
Are you people trying to tell me I'm old or what ?
over 700 posts ( I really do need to get out more )
at your advanced age mate, I'd get as much written down as possible....
Ah, 'tis good to have you back though....and you do know I'm just taking the mickey?
Hell, you're not that much older than Warne and McGrath.....
:D :D :D
Vic
"Sometimes the beauty of music can help us all find strength to deal with all the curves life can throw us." (D. Hodge.)
Ha ha ha how old do you think those 2 world famous and very good players are ? I reckon they could still play when they are my age and still cuse your mob plenty of headaches ( l o l )
Yes I know your taking the Mickey ... just bring my Mickey back when your finished ( l o l )
so did you cut your hair are you still a old rocker who is living in the past ( now who is taking the mickey )
I should start writting comedy ha ha ha ha aha
Aghhhh
Not only am I a senior citizen
I'm now a bloody senior member
Are you people trying to tell me I'm old or what ?
over 700 posts ( I really do need to get out more )
When I said you're not much older than Warne and McGrath, I was adding their ages together.... :P
just don't mention Rugby League for a couple of days eh....
Had the hair cut (I mentioned it in the coffee house post) but it's back to the same length, just a bit tidier....
And I'll go on record as saying Shane Warne is the best bowler I have EVER seen....
:D :D :D
Vic
"Sometimes the beauty of music can help us all find strength to deal with all the curves life can throw us." (D. Hodge.)
nice to see that you remembered the correct name for the Coffe house and not The Tea room ( L M A O ) <------have just found out what that means
Trust me Vic not a word about Rugby League mind you my smile is fairly big right now ( l o l )
Yeah when you mentioned those great crickters I thought you might be taking the Mickey again .. that's why I asked how old do you think they are 20 ?
20 + 20 =40 mmmm I'm only a little bit older then that oohhh like nearly 27 years that's pretty close ( ha ha ha )
Aghhhh
Not only am I a senior citizen
I'm now a bloody senior member
Are you people trying to tell me I'm old or what ?
over 700 posts ( I really do need to get out more )
