Martini Hour Glass
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BJM
It gets too hot to sleep at night,
and I'm too tired to think
of lost loves over setting suns,
and foolish things we dream.
Boardwalk rendevous, you loved
that sparkling summer sea.
Cruising Mission Boulevard,
skate punks, drunks, you and me.
[Chorus]
And if I see you again,
in the blue room above the sand
All wet skin and smiling eyes,
like every memory of you I have.
And we could stay out beyond,
the break and broken hearts
Have a high tide holiday,
before we drift apart.
Left some blood on the road between
the jetti and the pier.
A piece of me where I met you,
until it disappears.
[Bridge]
Then I'm asleep and
The days are colder,
Your jewel sky is gray,
I'm only slightly older.
I haven't seen you
I'm still glad you came,
Everything is different
but our past looks the same.
[Chorus]
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There are things I'm already considering with this one, but I'm holding off to avoid influencing first opinions.
wow sunset! :D
this is so beautiful, really.
I love:
lost loves over setting suns
sparkling summer sea
like every memory of you I have
Your jewel sky is gray,
Everything is different
but our past looks the same-stunning since second read:)
3rd, verse bridge- absolutely amazing.
the chorus is excellent, too...and the title gets visible there in the melancholy of the chorus' last two lines...like it can't last long and that's a fact.
you should be very proud of this one.
*congratulations* nothing I would change.
bluenightangel
"oh, eventually it will break your heart" - anders wendin
Hi sunsetNinja,
What a fantastic bit of writing!
A terrific description of Mission Boulevard, that paints a vivid image. I'm sure that folks who've never been there could picture it with your concise description. But that's not the best part of the song. I really loved:
"Lost loves over setting suns"
"And we could stay out beyond,
the break and broken hearts "
"Have a high tide holiday,
before we drift apart. "
And the lines "Everything is different but our past still looks the same" is a wonderful way to describe a pleasant memory.
It's just a great piece of writing, susnsetNinja.
I'm glad you dropped in. Hope you stick around.
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"...if heartaches were commercials, we'd all be on TV" -- John Prine
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sunsetNinja.
Yeah stick around some more. This is great stuff.
I love that chorus. That's just incredible. Makes me just feeeel goooood, and think about my own memories :)
Can't say I would change anything. Keep it coming.
Blessings. Olav
