It started as a happy song, but turned angry, as I started writing, hehe.
ok, vocals aren't completely finished in my mp3. I'm a terrible singer, lol. So it was quite forced, trying to do angry gravel singing. I think this is the 1st thing, I've been brave enough, for people to hear me "singing".
Blue Skies Tomorrow
Verse 1
Slug it all out, drive it all in
Wipe off the sweat, dripping from brow
Shovel this sh@t, throw it in there
Can't take no more?, do it, again
Hours drag on, years at a time
Life carries on, passing you by
Empty this hole, fill it again
Can't lift your arms?, do it, again
Chorus
Blue skies tomorrow, end of the sorrow
Clouds are receding, end of the bleeding
Blue skies tomorrow, end of the sorrow
Clouds are receding, end of the bleeding
Verse 2
Get in the hole, hip deep in mud
Cold chills your bones, nobody cares
Rip off the top, tear it all down
Can't feel your feet?, do it, again
Sliding down hill, covered in flith
Dirt fills your eyes, needs never end
Lift it all up, put it all down
Can't catch your breath? , do it, again
Chorus
Blue skies tomorrow, end of the sorrow
Clouds are receding, end of the bleeding
Blue skies tomorrow, end of the sorrow
Clouds are receding, end of the bleeding
Verse 3
Grinding the steel, sparks fill the air
Stinging your eyes, melting your skin
Run over here, run over there
Sick of this sh@t? do it, again
Tighten this up, take it apart
Missing your home, wasting your life
Dig to the bottom, than dig it somemore
Losing your grip? do it, again
Bridge
The day has come for this to end
Sanity, on this, depends
Time clicks on, while you sit by
Move your ass and learn to fly
Chorus
Blue skies tomorrow, end of the sorrow
Clouds are receding, end of the bleeding
Blue skies tomorrow, end of the sorrow
Clouds are receding, end of the bleeding
Blue skies tomorrow, end of the sorrow
Clouds are receding, end of the bleeding
Blue skies tomorrow, end of the sorrow
Clouds are receding, end of the bleeding
I really thought this one was awesome. It reminded me of Mudvyne's "Pushing Through" if you've heard it. I think my interpretation of this one is right, but correct me if I'm wrong:
You're explaining how life can be a b*tch sometimes, but you have to get back up and start over if you fall. Loved it.
Keep it up!
(FYI) If you write the word "a$$" the sensors will replace it with "donkey".
There's a thin fine line between hate and rage.
Now watch the line be crossed and break!
Hey, I'm pretty sure I've worked there. :wink:
Great song. I particularly liked the relentless feel of "do it all again" that kept cropping up. I can see that working well in the singing too. The only bit that didn't quite fire up for me was this:
The day has come for this to end
Sanity, on this, depends
Time clicks on, while you sit by
Move your arse and learn to fly
It didn't seem to quite measure up to the rest of the song, although I had no trouble understanding what it meant. A bit of re-writing might strengthen that up a bit. Just my feeling though. :)
The Mp3 sounded good, although I couldn't hear the words being sung. Not being a metal fan my comments about the music would be pretty worthless. Good to hear a different style here though. :)
Shift.
I'm usually not into metal, but this was quite cool
Your voice seem to fit the mood well.
Hours drag on, years at a time
WOW, GREAT LINE
Not much more to say
Blessings
Olav
Hey Shift,
well done man, this is great. Not really my genre, but hey, it doesnt mean I cant appreciate a good song when I see one. My only critisism is that all the verses are essentially saying the same thing and its only when we get to the bridge that we decide to do something about it. Maybe the bridge could come earlier and verse 3 more about what your going to do about it.
Like I say Metal's not my genre. I did enjoy though :D .
cheers
pb
Thanks for the kind words, all. I apprecaite them. Of course, comments helping me improve, are always welcome.
Pierson, Well I never clearly wote what the song is about, it is about working a thankless dead-end job. And HaHa, I didn't notice the donkey thing, until you mentioned it.
Chris, I re-wrote the bridge, about 10 mins before posting the song, the old one was even worse. I will rewite it again. I'm not crazy about the second part of the chrous either, so I might rewrite that too.
PB, I know, I didn't follow a big story line with the song. In a way, repeating the same thing over and over is the point, I was trying to make.
Great lyrics! Also, your recording of it sound good. Only comment on that is that I can't hear the singing very well. Good job!
