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(@jamestoffee)
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Y12W21 Give Me Love

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=====Revised Version=====

A section
When we’re face to face
I feel my pulse race
But words trip and fail; they can’t keep up the pace
When all I have to say is

B section
Give me love
Give me love
Give me love
Give me love

I want it; I need it; yes, I do
I want it; I need it; just like you
I want it; I need it; yes, I do
I want it; I need it; just like you

Give me love
Give me love
Give me love

A section
Blank grin on my face
Arms to embrace
Soul mate don’t hide from me amid the human race
When all you have to say is

repeat B section

Bridge
Lucid just like you
Stupid just like you
I’m lost just like you
Give me love
Lovely just like you
Ugly through and through
I’m here just like you
Give me love
Give me love
Give me love
Give me love

=====Original Version=====
A section
Monitors in place
Feel your pulse race
Words trip and fail; they can’t keep up the pace
When all you have to say is

B section
Give me love
Give me love
Give me love
Give me love

I want it; I need it; yes, I do
I want it; I need it; just like you
I want it; I need it; yes, I do
I want it; I need it; just like you

Give me love
Give me love
Give me love

A section
Blank grin on my face
Arms to embrace
Soul mate don’t hide from me amid the human race
When all you have to say is

repeat B section

Bridge
Lucid just like you
Stupid just like you
I’m lost just like you
Give me love
Lovely just like you
Ugly through and through
I’m here just like you
Give me love
Give me love
Give me love
Give me love


   
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(@john-sargent)
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James,
I like the rhythm changes. This song works. I enjoyed it.


   
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(@jamestoffee)
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Hi John,

Thanks for the listen and post :D

-James


   
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(@hobson)
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Sorry, James. I've really enjoyed most of your songs. This isn't one of them. I don't understand the bridge. I don't see how the monitors in the first paragraph tie into the rest of the song.

Maybe I'm trying to read too much into a song with simple lyrics.

Renee


   
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(@jamestoffee)
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Sorry, James. I've really enjoyed most of your songs. This isn't one of them.
No worries :wink:
I don't understand the bridge. I don't see how the monitors in the first paragraph tie into the rest of the song.

Maybe I'm trying to read too much into a song with simple lyrics.

Don't blame yourself.

I tried a deeper concept that isn't very clear or simple.

The singer doesn't want to be "just like everyone else"....the idea his is fighting against is "everyone needs love.....

.........in this case doesn't want "love" b/c he sees "love" as emotional and tries to control his life by subduing his emotions

So I tried to equate the singer more in "robotic" terms "monitoring" his vital signs; acknowledging his pulse is racing because of attraction to a woman....failing to be able to talk to her because he is overcome with emotions.

The bridge is then a defeated admission and "pragmatic" call out for love....

The singer is saying, "Hey, ok, I admit, I am human just like all humans- I need love"

lucid -aware I am alive,

stupid (we all do stupid things; especially when emotions overtake thoughts),

we're all "lost" searching for meaning in life,

humanity is both lovely (beautiful) and ugly at the same time......

and we are all "here" (a pragmatic approach to simplifying the search for love process.....ie If you can't be with the one you love, love the one your with).

...so I am open to suggestions in the lyrics to make the ideas come across clearer :wink:

Thanks for the listen and post; especially when it wasn't something you enjoyed.

James


   
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(@hobson)
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James, maybe if you changed the first verse to first person it would be clearer. Also try "watch your pulse race" instead of "feel your pulse race."

Some mention of biofeedback or just feedback might help. And/or control, self-restraint, or discipline.

Renee


   
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(@jamestoffee)
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POOF! changes made :mrgreen:

When we’re face to face
I feel my pulse race
But words trip and fail; they can’t keep up the pace
When all I have to say is


   
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(@hobson)
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James, it's easier to follow now. But you've lost the original concept of the guy trying to control his emotions and finding out that he can't. That's still a usable idea for a future song.

Renee


   
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